Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense when talking about childhood; give a brief supporting detail. Keep it natural and concise, up to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words if you add reasons.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood every weekend, and it was my main way of getting to friends' houses. As a result, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

提案: Avoid hesitations and unclear words. Use correct verbs and clearer structure: state your opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because", "and", "also"). Keep vocabulary relevant and sentences grammatical.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and short trips to the market. Moreover, they are affordable and convenient in crowded areas, so lots of families own at least one bicycle.

× Yes, I enjoy playing with my bicycle.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed playing with my bicycle when I was a child.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Enjoy' is present tense; change to 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs (e.g., 'I enjoyed') when referring to past experiences.

× Yeah, because most of the people in my country delete riding bike because the bike it can help to, you know, exercise and you know it's easy to drive to go to the market.

✓ Yes, because most people in my country ride bicycles; bikes can help you exercise and are easy to use for going to the market.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect word choice ('delete' is wrong), redundancy ('because' repeated), incorrect pronoun and verb forms ('riding bike' should be 'ride bicycles'), and awkward phrasing ('the bike it can help to'). Corrections: replace 'delete' with appropriate verb 'do' or omit it, use plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes', remove redundant 'because', fix subject-verb structure ('bikes can help you exercise'), and simplify 'easy to drive to go to the market' to 'easy to use for going to the market'. Suggestion: break long ideas into shorter clauses, choose correct verbs, and keep consistent pluralization and pronoun usage.