Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity by using correct tense and sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words.

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, I had a happy childhood and found other ways to have fun, such as playing games with friends and helping my parents.

提案: Make your answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, because, therefore). Correct word choice and grammar (public transportation, prefer motorbikes) will improve score.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars and public transport is limited. Therefore, bicycles and motorbikes are common for commuting, especially in rural areas where distances are short and roads are narrow.

× Honest to say I don't have any bike because my family is quite poor so they not.

✓ Honest to say, I didn't have a bike because my family was quite poor, so they did not.

Incorrect pronoun/verb use and negative formation. 'They not' is ungrammatical; past-tense context requires 'did not' and 'didn't have' for the student. Also 'family is quite poor' should match past timeframe 'was quite poor'. Use of 'honest to say' should be 'to be honest' for idiomatic phrase.

× Have enough money to buy a bicycle bicycle for me at that time, but this OK no problem.

✓ They did not have enough money to buy a bicycle for me at that time, but that was okay; I had no problem with it.

Sentence fragments and repetition ('bicycle bicycle') make this ungrammatical. Missing subject and auxiliary: add 'They did not have'. Use past tense 'was' to match timeframe. Combine clauses with proper punctuation and replace 'this OK no problem' with a clear past-tense comment.

× I think I have a good childhood so.

✓ I think I had a good childhood.

Tense inconsistency and extra filler 'so'. The speaker refers to a past period, so use past tense 'had'. Drop unnecessary final 'so' to make the sentence natural.

× Yes, I think so because my country is a poor country so all that they have to go to work by bike, they don't have public transportation like bus car.

✓ Yes, I think so because my country is poor, so many people have to go to work by bike; they don't have public transportation like buses or cars.

Several issues: repetition 'a poor country' is awkward—'my country is poor' suffices. 'All that they have to go' is ungrammatical; use 'many people have to go'. Use plural nouns for countable items: 'buses or cars'. Maintain present tense but correct subject reference and word order.

× So normally they you bike and if a person has a lot of money they will buy a motorbike.

✓ So normally they use bikes, and if a person has a lot of money, they will buy a motorbike.

Pronoun and verb missing: 'they you bike' is incorrect; add verb 'use' and correct noun form 'bikes'. Also add commas for clarity.

× So why is the best?

✓ So that's why it's the best.

Fragment and incorrect word order. 'So why is the best?' is a question form but context requires an explanation: 'that's why it's the best.' Use contraction 'it's' for 'it is' and correct structure.