Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır, ancak daha doğal ve ayrıntılı bir yapı kullanarak geliştirilebilir. Konu cümlesinden sonra 1-2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin (örneğin hangi tür bisiklet, ne sıklıkta kullandığınız veya bisikletle ilgili bir anı). Bağlaçlar veya zaman zarfları kullanarak cevap akışını iyileştirin.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I used almost every day to ride to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood. It had a little bell and training wheels at first, but I removed them after a few months.

提案: Cevap net ama bazı dilbilgisi hataları, belirsiz ifadeler ve tutarsızlıklar var. 'Peoples' yerine 'people', 'ebooks E bikes' gibi karışık ifadeler düzeltilmeli. Daha mantıklı bir yapı için görüş bildirildikten sonra nedenler ve bir örnek verin; ayrıca karşıt görüşü kabul ederek bağlaçlar kullanın (e.g. however, although).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular anymore because most people prefer cars for convenience and speed. However, electric bikes are becoming more common in big cities as a practical alternative for short trips.

× Peoples are using cars more than bikes and bikes are now old for some people.

✓ People are using cars more than bikes, and bikes are now old-fashioned for some people.

Use 'people' (plural noun) not 'peoples' which refers to distinct ethnic groups. Also, 'old' is not the best adjective here; 'old-fashioned' or 'outdated' conveys that bikes are considered unfashionable. Ensure subject is plural 'people' to match the plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: Replace 'peoples' with 'people' and use 'old-fashioned' or 'outdated' for clarity.

× Everyone is using ebooks E bikes nowadays.

✓ Everyone is using e-bikes nowadays.

The phrase 'ebooks E bikes' is incorrect and unclear. If the intended meaning is electric bicycles, use 'e-bikes' (or 'electric bikes'). 'Everyone' is singular in form but agrees with the progressive verb 'is using' when meaning 'all people' in general contexts, so 'is using e-bikes' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'e-bikes' or 'electric bikes' and remove 'ebooks' which is unrelated.