Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and logical. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'had', 'taught') and avoid fragments. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and include a brief reflection or result to complete the answer.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My older brother taught me to ride it in our neighborhood park, and I remember feeling excited but a little nervous at first. Over a few weeks I grew more confident and could cycle to my friends’ houses on my own.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Use correct collocations and tense (e.g., 'bicycles are', 'we use', 'are used'). Provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons to support your opinion. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster and more convenient for daily commutes. As a result, bicycles are mainly used for leisure or exercise, such as riding in parks on weekends.

× Absolutely yes. I have a bike.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The original uses present tense 'have' which is incorrect for past reference. Change to past simple 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense when talking about past situations.

× I remember way back when I was still a kid, my brother teach me how to ride it.

✓ I remember, way back when I was still a kid, my brother taught me how to ride it.

The clause refers to a past event, so the verb should be in past simple. 'Brother teach' is incorrect; use 'taught' to agree with the past subject and maintain correct past tense. Also add a comma after 'I remember' for clarity.

× I really enjoyed that moment because it is my first time and.

✓ I really enjoyed that moment because it was my first time.

The sentence mixes past and present ('enjoyed' past vs 'is' present) and ends abruptly with 'and.' For consistency, change 'is' to past 'was' and remove the extraneous 'and.' Ensure tense consistency within the sentence.

× Through time I know how to load.

✓ Over time I learned how to balance/ride it properly.

The original 'Through time I know how to load' is ungrammatical and uses present tense 'know' for a past learning event; also 'load' is likely the wrong verb. Use past simple 'learned' and a correct verb like 'balance' or 'ride' to convey the intended meaning. 'Over time' is a more natural phrase.

× Honestly speaking, no. There's a bike in our country, but we do not casually use it.

✓ Honestly speaking, no. There are bikes in our country, but we do not use them casually.

The speaker means bikes in general (plural), so use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are.' Also change 'it' to 'them' to match plural. 'Use them casually' is the natural word order.

× We usually use motorcycles or cars in in transports.

✓ We usually use motorcycles or cars for transportation.

The phrase 'in in transports' is incorrect and repetitive. Use the noun 'transportation' and the preposition 'for' to indicate purpose: 'for transportation.' This corrects the preposition and word choice.

× Bikes used only as leisure time.

✓ Bikes are used only for leisure.

The original lacks auxiliary 'are' to form passive voice and uses 'as leisure time' awkwardly. Use passive 'are used' and the preposition 'for' with the noun 'leisure' to make a natural sentence: 'Bikes are used only for leisure.'