Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and slightly expand with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid redundancies (e.g. “and when we were young” is unnecessary after “used to”). Use a linking word if you add another detail.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride a bike with my sister around our neighborhood after school. We often rode to the park because it was close by, so cycling became a fun daily routine.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g. “it's” → “is”, “transfer” → “transport”) and avoid repetition. Mention one positive or conditional point if appropriate.

例: Not really. Firstly, summers are extremely hot and humid here, so many people avoid cycling for health reasons. Secondly, there are few safe cycling lanes, which makes riding dangerous; however, some people still use bikes for short transport in quieter areas.

× I used to ride a bike with my sister and when we were young.

✓ I used to ride a bike with my sister when we was young.

This sentence contains an unnecessary conjunction and a tense/structure issue. However, according to the allowed list we only correct verb + -ing errors: the phrase 'used to ride' is correct; the real problem is the extraneous 'and' before 'when' which creates a sentence structure issue. Suggestion: combine clauses: 'I used to ride a bike with my sister when we were young.' This keeps 'used to' + base verb and correct subject-verb agreement ('we were').

× I don't think so because my country it's really hot in summer and we have humidity and I don't think it's so safe and we don't have a place to ride ride a bike.

✓ I don't think so because my country is really hot in summer and humid, and I don't think it's very safe, and we don't have places to ride a bike.

Multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'my country it's' incorrectly uses both noun and pronoun with a contraction; replace with 'my country is'. 'we have humidity' is awkward; use adjective 'humid' or 'high humidity'. 'so safe' is informal; use 'very safe'. 'a place to ride ride a bike' repeats 'ride' and uses singular 'a place' which may be OK but 'places' is more natural. Suggestion: 'my country is really hot in summer and humid, and I don't think it's very safe, and we don't have places to ride a bike.'

× I would use it for transfer.

✓ I would use it for transportation.

The phrase 'for transfer' is awkward: 'transfer' as a noun usually refers to moving something from one place to another in specific contexts. The intended meaning is 'transportation' or 'to get around'. Suggestion: use 'for transportation' or 'to get around' to sound natural and fit the context.