Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike as a child."), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases. Also correct grammar: use past tense for childhood (didn't/had) and concise explanations (e.g., safety concerns, parents' decision).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was too dangerous to ride on busy roads. For example, they worried about traffic and preferred I walk or use public transport for safety.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "so") and correct verb forms (present simple: "are", "use"). Be concise: 2–3 sentences, each with one clear point. Mention who uses bikes and why (cost, convenience, culture).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many commuters and delivery workers use motorcycles to travel quickly through traffic and save money on fuel.

× Yes, I don't have a bike when I am a child because bike is very dangerous in riding on a road and my parents don't give me a bike for riding and there are so many dangers and I have one son of my parents and they don't give

✓ Yes, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because riding a bike on the road is very dangerous, and my parents didn't give me one because of the many dangers.

Errors: incorrect present tense used for past situation and inconsistent pronouns. Use past simple ('didn't have', 'was', 'didn't give') to describe a past state. 'Bike is very dangerous in riding on a road' is unnatural; use the gerund 'riding a bike on the road is very dangerous' or 'it was too dangerous to ride on the road.' Remove 'I have one son of my parents' which is unclear and irrelevant. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout when speaking about childhood; use clear subjects (my parents) and concise clauses.

× Yes bikes are popular in my country because so many people have bikes and they were going for a job on the bike and they have so many different kind of work they will do on the bike and they will popular

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many people have them and use them to go to work. There are many different kinds of jobs for which people use bikes, so bikes are very common.

Errors: article and plural form issues and awkward verb tenses. 'So many people' is acceptable but 'so many different kind of work' should be 'many different kinds of work' (plural and plural noun). 'They were going for a job on the bike' mixes past continuous with general fact; use present simple 'use them to go to work' for habitual actions. 'They will popular' is ungrammatical; use 'so bikes are very common' or 'bikes are popular.' Suggestion: use present simple for general facts, ensure noun plurals ('kinds'), and use appropriate pronouns ('them' for bikes).