Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., “three-wheeled,” “at first,” “two-wheeled”), and remove the question back to the examiner. Use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes. I had a three-wheeled bike as a child, which made it easy to learn at first. Later my parents bought me a two-wheeled bike when I was about ten, and I remember feeling proud when I could ride it by myself.

提案: Answer directly and provide specific evidence. Correct pronunciation/word choice ("bike" not "by"); use precise phrases ("cycling is popular", "there are regular races"). Provide one clear reason and one concrete example, linked with words like "because" or "for example." Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country because many people use bikes for commuting and exercise. For example, there are annual cycling races and local clubs that organize weekend rides for people of all ages.

× I used to have a bike with three wheel.

✓ I used to have a bike with three wheels.

The noun 'wheel' should be plural because there are three of them. Use the plural form 'wheels' after a number greater than one. Suggestion: Make nouns plural when referring to more than one item (three wheels).

× That's kind of easy for me to start riding a bike at 1st and then we changed it to two wheel, which is for a teenager.

✓ It was kind of easy for me to start riding a bike at first, and then we changed it to two wheels, which is for teenagers.

Several issues here: 'That's' (that is) is present; context refers to past so use 'It was'. '1st' should be written 'first'. 'wheel' should be plural 'wheels'. 'a teenager' is too specific; general statement uses plural 'teenagers'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (use past when describing past events), write ordinal words in full, pluralize nouns that refer to multiple people or objects, and use plural for general groups.

× Yeah, I guess. And yeah, that's kind of fun.

✓ Yeah, I guess, and that was kind of fun.

The original mixes present tense 'that's' with a past narrative. For coherence, change to past 'that was'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense across related sentences describing past experiences.

× When do you mean like bike, bike?

✓ What do you mean by 'bike'?

The original is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use 'What do you mean by...' to ask for clarification. Suggestion: Use standard question forms to request clarification: 'What do you mean by...?'.

× By is really popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are really popular in my country.

The pronoun/word 'By' is incorrect and likely a typo. Use the plural noun 'Bikes' to match 'are' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use the correct noun and pluralize when making general statements about a category.

× We have a competition about bike like biking all over the trio attack, trio track.

✓ We have competitions about biking, like races across the triathlon course.

The original is unclear and uses incorrect word forms: 'a competition about bike' should be 'competitions about biking' or 'a bike competition'; 'trio attack, trio track' is likely intended as 'triathlon course' or 'tri-track'. I corrected to a clear, natural phrase. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms ('biking'), pluralize if referring to recurring events, and choose precise terms ('race', 'triathlon course') to convey meaning.

× Yes, and usually it's from it's since when we were young.

✓ Yes, and usually it's been that way since we were young.

The original mixes 'it's from it's since' which is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'it's been' to indicate a situation that started in the past and continues to the present, followed by 'since we were young'. Suggestion: Use 'has/have been' plus a time expression with 'since' to show continuity from the past to the present.