Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus specific supporting details. Use correct pronouns, singular/plural forms, and past tense consistently. Add one linking phrase and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Include a brief specific example (e.g., where you rode or who you rode with) to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. For example, I would ride to the small park near my house almost every afternoon and practice balancing on one wheel. This made me feel independent and happy because it was my first way of getting around by myself.

提案: Avoid unclear phrases and pronoun errors; state your main idea directly and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however') to make the answer coherent. Use present simple tense for general facts and give one concrete statistic or situation if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes. For example, many office workers ride bicycles to work during rush hour to avoid traffic, and in some cities bike lanes are common. Therefore, bicycles remain a common mode of transport for daily travel.

× Yes, I had my 1 bicycle when I was child and I loved riding it around their neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'child' and incorrect possessive/demonstrative 'my 1 bicycle' and wrong possessive 'their neighborhood'. Use 'a bicycle' (singular non-specific), 'a child' requires the article 'a', and 'my neighborhood' matches the speaker. Suggestion: remove the extraneous '1', add 'a' before 'child', and change 'their' to 'my' to keep sentence coherent.

× It feels special because no one of my friend had bikes.

✓ It felt special because none of my friends had bikes.

Tense mismatch and subject-verb agreement: the speaker refers to a past feeling so use past tense 'felt' not 'feels'. 'No one of my friend' is ungrammatical; use 'none of my friends' for plural possession. Also 'had' is correct in past but aligns with 'felt'. Suggestion: use 'felt' and 'none of my friends' for correct agreement and plurality.

× So I often explore neighbor parks by my own bike cycle which made me feel like independent and really happy.

✓ So I often explored neighborhood parks on my own bicycle, which made me feel independent and really happy.

Mixed tenses: 'often explore' (present) conflicts with past narrative; change to past 'explored'. 'neighbor parks' should be 'neighborhood parks'. 'by my own bike cycle' is awkward; use 'on my own bicycle'. 'like independent' needs article removal: 'feel independent'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive 'which' clause. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use natural collocations like 'on my own bicycle' and 'feel independent'.

× From my perspective, I really think he has Bikes are really popular in my country because many people have their own bikes.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are really popular in my country because many people have their own.

The original has extraneous fragments 'I really think he has' and inconsistent capitalization 'Bikes'. Remove irrelevant phrase and capitalize only proper nouns. Also avoid repeating 'bikes' at the end; 'have their own' is sufficient and natural. Suggestion: remove unrelated words and streamline the sentence.

× Like whenever they used to go in their offices or work, they all use bikes as bikes are really comfortable for us.

✓ Whenever they go to their offices or workplaces, they often use bikes because bikes are really convenient for them.

'Used to go' implies a past habitual action; since general statement about current habits, use present 'go'. Preposition 'in their offices' should be 'to their offices'. 'Work' as a noun works but 'workplaces' is clearer. 'All use' is unnatural; use 'often use' or 'typically use'. 'Comfortable for us' is better as 'convenient for them' to match the general subject. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, correct preposition 'to', and choose appropriate adverb ('often') and adjective ('convenient').