Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student did not answer the question and instead asked the examiner to repeat or rephrase. For Part 1 you should answer directly with a short, natural statement. Focus on providing a clear topic sentence and one or two brief supporting details. Keep responses concise (no more than 5 sentences) and use linking words if you add details.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was seven, and I used it every day to ride with friends around the neighborhood. Because it was small and light, I learned to ride quickly and I loved going to the park on weekends.

提案: This is a good, direct answer with clear reasons. To improve further, add one specific example or brief comparison and use a linking word to connect reasons smoothly. Also avoid filler sounds like “Ah” at the start. Keep within three sentences maximum for clarity.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to save money and fuel. For example, commuters in the city often cycle to work instead of taking the bus, since bikes are cheaper and faster for short distances. Moreover, cycling reduces traffic congestion and is better for the environment.

× Can you make me a question then I answer it.

✓ Can you ask me a question so I can answer it?

This sentence has sentence structure problems and missing modal/connector usage. The original uses 'make me a question' which is unnatural in English; the correct verb is 'ask'. Also it lacks a connector and appropriate modal for ability/policy: use 'so I can' to express purpose and ability. Change the word order and add 'can' to make the request polite and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'ask me a question' and include 'so I can answer it' or 'and I will answer it.'

× Ah yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to save money and fuel, and they're also convenient for short trips and better for the environment.

✓ Ah yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to save money and fuel, and they are also convenient for short trips and better for the environment.

The original uses contraction 'they're', which is acceptable in speech but if correcting for formal grammar consistency, expanding contractions avoids ambiguity. More importantly, there is a minor pronoun clarity issue: 'them' correctly refers to bikes, and 'they' likewise. The main correction is stylistic: replace contraction with 'they are' for clarity. If focusing strictly on listed problem types, this is an 'Incorrect use of pronouns' entry to note clarity; ensure pronouns clearly refer to 'bikes'.