Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is very short, informal and contains a tense/meaning issue (‘need’ is present tense and odd for a past question). Give a clear topic sentence saying whether you had one, then add one or two brief supporting details (age, how you used it, feelings). Use past tense and natural linking words (e.g. ‘Yes, I did. When I was…’). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about seven and I used it to ride to school and play with friends in the neighborhood. Because there weren’t many cars around, cycling felt safe and very freeing, so I rode it almost every day.

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but is disorganized, repetitive and contains grammatical errors and unfinished thought. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and reason), then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g. commuting, cost, traffic) using linking words like ‘because’, ‘for example’ or ‘as a result’. Keep sentences concise and finish your idea.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and help people avoid heavy traffic. For example, during peak hours many commuters choose bicycles to reach work or school faster, and as a result streets are full of cyclists in the morning.

× Yeah, totally, I need it.

✓ Yeah, totally, I had one.

The student is answering a past-tense question ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so the pronoun/verb choice 'I need it' is incorrect in tense and reference. This is a misuse of pronoun/verb combination to refer to a past possession. Use past tense 'had' and a clear noun 'one' (or 'a bike') to match the question. Suggestion: say 'I had one' or 'I had a bike' to correctly indicate past possession.

× Yes, it is definitely since most of the people here travel by bikes as the traffic, the peak hours, office timings, it is it is quite rush hours and people would definitely want to travel or to work or school quickly so they do not

✓ Yes, definitely. Most people here travel by bike because traffic during peak hours and office times is quite heavy, and people want to get to work or school quickly, so they do not...

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to the general topic, pluralization 'travel by bikes' (should be 'travel by bike'), repeated words 'it is it is', and subject-verb agreement 'traffic ... is' rather than 'travel by bikes'. These fall under subject-verb agreement and related grammar problems (pluralization and article/pronoun choice). Corrections: use 'Most people' (no 'the'), 'travel by bike' (fixed noun form), 'because' to show reason, 'traffic ... is quite heavy' for correct verb agreement, and restructure the sentence into clearer clauses. Suggestion: keep tense present simple for general facts and ensure subjects and verbs agree, avoid redundant words, and complete the final clause.