Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сфокусируйтесь на ясном, грамматически правильном ответе и кратком объяснении причины. Начните с прямого утверждения о факте (Yes/No + краткое предложение), затем добавьте одно или два поддерживающих предложения с причинами. Обратите внимание на времена (past simple для прошлого), правильное употребление местоимений и артиклей, и избегайте лишних слов. Например: "I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling and getting injured. I preferred walking or using public transport instead."

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling and getting hurt. Instead, I usually walked or took the bus to school.

提案: Давайте более чёткую и связную структуру: сначала дайте прямой ответ (Yes/No + краткое пояснение), затем добавьте конкретную причину и пример. Используйте правильную форму существительных и глаголов (bikes are, people use), избегайте повторов и лишних слов, применяйте связки (because, however, for example). Например: "Bikes are not very popular because many people prefer cars or buses; however, they are more common in some cities."

例: In my view, bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer to use cars or buses. However, you can sometimes see more cyclists in city centres, especially among students and delivery workers.

× Unfortunately now when I was child I didn't have a bike 'cause IA little bit afraid to break my neck or my other arms and also I afraid of very quickly of this bike.

✓ Unfortunately, when I was a child I didn't have a bike because I was a little bit afraid I would break my neck or my arm, and I was also afraid that the bike would move too quickly.

The sentence contains multiple past tense and tense-consistency errors. Use past tense forms for feelings and actions that happened in the past: 'was a child' (correct), 'didn't have' (correct), and 'was afraid' (not 'I afraid' or 'IA'). Use 'would' to express fear about a possible result in the past ('afraid I would break'). 'My other arms' is incorrect; use singular 'my arm' (singular and natural). 'Because' is the correct conjunction (not 'cause' in informal contracted form). Also use 'that' to introduce the feared result ('afraid that the bike would move too quickly'). Suggestions: 1) Keep verbs describing past states in past tense ('was', 'was afraid'). 2) Use 'would' + base verb to show a feared potential outcome in past. 3) Use singular/plural correctly for body parts (one arm). 4) Write 'because' in full in formal answers and proofread for typos ('I' instead of 'IA').

× In my in my view, bike in our country are not popular because of some of people I use a car or a bus, but I rarely I rarely say a people who use bike in my country, but sometimes I see.

✓ In my view, bikes in our country are not popular because many people use cars or buses. I rarely see people who use bikes in my country, although sometimes I do.

The original contains present-tense agreement and sentence-structure problems. Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb agreement 'are' for the subject 'bikes'. Replace 'some of people I use' with 'many people use' to form a correct subject-verb phrase. Remove repeated fragments ('I rarely I rarely') and incorrect articles ('a people' is wrong; use 'people' without an article). Use 'I rarely see people who use bikes' for clearer meaning and add 'although sometimes I do' to acknowledge occasional sightings. Suggestions: 1) Ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple ('bikes are', 'people use'). 2) Avoid unnecessary repetition. 3) Use 'people' without 'a' and place verbs directly after subject for clarity.