Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "I was remembered" and "bounced me a bike." Use past simple for past events and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small bicycle when I was about six, and he spent weekends teaching me how to ride it. Because he practiced with me regularly, I learned quickly and felt very confident cycling around the neighborhood.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then explain with specific reasons and a brief comparison. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and correct phrasing (e.g. "public transport" instead of "popular traffic"). Finish the sentence and avoid repetition.

例: Not really. In my country most people prefer public transport such as buses and trains because they are more convenient for long distances. For example, many commuters use motorcycles or buses daily due to crowded roads and limited bike lanes, so cycling is less common in cities.

× Absolutely yes. I was remembered as when I was a little kid my dad bounced me a bike and he also practiced to ride bike with me.

✓ Absolutely yes. I remember that when I was a little kid my dad bought me a bike and he also taught me to ride it.

Issues: incorrect verb choice and form ('was remembered' is passive and wrong; should be active 'I remember') so Grammar Problem Type ID 26 (Sentence structure errors) and ID 9 (Verb in the past participle form) and ID 8 (Verb + -ing form) partly apply; also incorrect verbs 'bounced' and 'practiced to ride bike' and missing object for 'ride'. Correction replaces 'was remembered' with 'I remember' (correct present memory statement), 'bounced' with 'bought' (correct verb), 'practiced to ride bike with me' with 'taught me to ride it' (correct verb and pronoun). Suggestion: use active voice for memories ('I remember'), use correct verbs ('buy' for purchasing), use 'teach someone to do something' or 'practice doing' with gerund, and include objects for verbs like 'ride it'.

× Absolutely no because well in a country people they prefer to use another traffic.

✓ Absolutely not, because in my country people prefer to use other forms of transportation.

Issues: 'Absolutely no' should be 'Absolutely not' (adverb vs determiner) so ID 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs) and ID 26 (Sentence structure errors); 'a country' should be 'my country' (article/pronoun error) ID 22 (Article errors)/ID 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns); 'people they' is redundant (pronoun error) ID 12; 'another traffic' is wrong collocation (use 'other forms of transportation') ID 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/collocations). Suggestion: use 'in my country', avoid redundant pronouns, and use 'transportation' or 'modes of transport' instead of 'traffic'.

× So for example they prefer to use popular traffic like bus or train, maybe they also use motorcycle to use it every day because in my country the road is

✓ For example, they prefer popular transportation such as buses or trains; they may also use motorcycles every day because in my country the roads are...

Issues: 'popular traffic' is incorrect collocation; should be 'popular transportation' or 'popular modes of transport' (ID 11). 'bus or train' should be plural 'buses or trains' when speaking generally (ID 1 Singular and plural issue). 'maybe they also use motorcycle to use it every day' is ungrammatical; use 'they may also use motorcycles every day' (modal and plural issues: ID 4 and ID 1). 'the road is' is incomplete and likely needs plural 'roads are' (ID 1 and ID 26). Suggestion: use correct collocations ('transportation', 'buses'), make nouns plural for general statements, use 'may' for possibility, and ensure sentence is complete.