Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tense (commuted), remove repetition, and finish the sentence with a specific detail. Use one or two linking words to add a supporting detail. Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school because it was faster than walking and I enjoyed the fresh air. For example, I usually biked along a tree-lined path near my house, which made the commute pleasant.

提案: Make the response more natural and precise. Begin with a direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, and because). Correct grammar (public transportation is, bike lanes rather than bike clothes) and avoid repeating phrases. Conclude briefly.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Korea. This is because public transportation is well developed, so many people prefer buses and subways, and there are relatively few dedicated bike lanes in many cities. As a result, cycling is less convenient for daily commuting.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was young and I went to many places with my bike especially I commute commute to school, riding my bike. I like it because I enjoy the air during

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was young and I went to many places with it. Especially, I commuted to school by bike, riding it. I liked it because I enjoyed the fresh air.

The student mixed past and present tenses. The context is about childhood, so past tense should be used consistently: 'commute' must be changed to past 'commuted', 'like' to 'liked', and 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. Also repeated 'commute' is a typo and was removed. Use 'by bike' or 'on my bike' for clarity; 'fresh air' is a natural collocation. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when describing past habits and proofread for duplicate words.

× No I don't think so because Because public transportation are well developed in Korea.

✓ No, I don't think so because public transportation is well developed in Korea.

The subject 'public transportation' is an uncountable noun treated as singular, so the verb must be 'is' not 'are'. Also remove the duplicate 'Because' and add a comma after 'No'. Suggestion: identify the grammatical number of nouns (countable vs uncountable) to choose the correct verb form.

× So many people use public transportation to commute and I think the bike clothes are not prepared well so that's the reason I think

✓ So many people use public transportation to commute, and I think bicycle infrastructure is not well prepared, so that's the reason.

The phrase 'bike clothes' is incorrect for the intended meaning; likely 'bike lanes' or 'bicycle infrastructure' is meant. Also 'are not prepared well' is awkward; use passive 'is not well prepared' for singular 'infrastructure'. Tense (present) is acceptable because this is a general statement, but sentence structure needed fixing: add a comma before 'and', replace the redundant 'I think' at the end, and choose correct noun. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary ('bicycle infrastructure' or 'bike lanes') and avoid repeating phrases like 'I think' twice.