Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Fix grammar and clarity, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Be specific about the bike (who bought it, what kind it was) and keep to 2–4 short sentences. Avoid hesitations and incorrect verb forms (use past simple for past events).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my father bought for me when I was at military school. It was sturdy and had a basket, so I used it to cycle to school almost every day.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use present simple or present continuous when talking about current popularity. Avoid vague phrases and reduce fillers like “umm”.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are still quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and among students. For example, many people cycle to work or school because it is cheap and convenient, although car use is increasing in big cities.

× Ah yes I did when I were in military school.

✓ Ah yes I did when I was in military school.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the singular first-person subject 'I' in the past tense. Use 'was' for I/he/she/it in simple past. Suggestion: Use 'was' with singular subjects in past tense (I was, he was).

× I have a spy that were both by my father.

✓ I had a spy that was bought by my father.

Multiple issues: tense and pronoun/word choice. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was' earlier. 'Spy' appears to be a wrong word; likely 'bike' or 'spy' is a typo — here corrected to 'spy' kept but context implies 'bike'; also 'were' is plural past form but the subject 'spy' is singular so use 'was'. Additionally 'both' is incorrect; probably intended 'bought'. Suggestion: Use past tense 'had' for past possession, use 'was' for singular past, and replace incorrect word 'both' with 'bought' if meaning purchase. If the intended noun was 'bike', replace 'spy' with 'bike'.

× Uh, I used to cycle to school.

✓ Uh, I used to cycle to school.

This sentence is grammatically correct for describing a habitual action in the past using 'used to'. No change is needed. Keep 'used to' plus base verb for past habits.

× Just umm, people used to cycle with bikes a lot in their daily.

✓ Um, people used to cycle a lot in their daily lives.

The phrase 'cycle with bikes' is redundant because 'cycle' already implies using a bike. The noun phrase 'in their daily' is incomplete; the correct noun is 'daily lives' to express routine. Also the filler 'Just umm' can be simplified. Suggestion: Say 'people used to cycle a lot in their daily lives' or 'people used to cycle a lot every day'.