Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve tense consistency, fluency and conciseness. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid repeating subjects, and use linking words to add one or two specific details. For example, say you had a bike, how often you rode it, who helped you and one memory or feeling. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a small bicycle as a child and I rode it often with my family on weekends. However, I wasn't very confident at first, so my mother or grandfather would hold the seat until I learned to balance. I remember feeling proud the day I rode a whole block by myself.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Use correct grammar and avoid hesitations or repeated fragments. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and a concise structure: opinion + reason + example or brief comparison.

例: Not really. In my country most people prefer trains, buses or private cars because they are faster and more convenient for long commutes. For example, in the city centre cycling is uncommon due to heavy traffic and limited bike lanes.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Do' is present; 'did' is the correct past-tense auxiliary for 'have' in this context.

× I would often ride my bicycle with my family, but I couldn't ride that so well, so I was helped by my mother or father or my grandfather.

✓ I often rode my bicycle with my family, but I couldn't ride it very well, so my mother, father, or grandfather helped me.

The sentence mixes conditional 'would' with past simple; while 'would' can describe habitual past actions, here simple past is clearer. 'Ride that' is incorrect referent; use 'ride it'. 'So well' is acceptable but 'very well' is more natural. Passive 'I was helped by...' is awkward; active 'helped me' is clearer. Also punctuation and word order improved for clarity.

× No, I don't think so because in my country people often use public transportation like train or bus and their car.

✓ No, I don't think so because in my country people often use public transportation like trains, buses, and cars.

The student uses present tense 'don't think' correctly for a general opinion, but the list contains a plural issue: 'train or bus and their car' mixes singulars and incorrect possessive. Use plurals 'trains, buses, and cars' for general statements. 'Their car' is ambiguous; 'cars' fits generalization.

× So but I have I think I they have to ride it.

✓ However, I think people should ride bikes more often.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing with repeated pronouns ('I have I think I they'). It needs restructuring. Use a clear subject 'people' and modal 'should' to express recommendation. This follows the context of discussing popularity and what people ought to do.