Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, what you used it for). Use linking words if you add details. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was six, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood with my friends. It helped me feel independent and gave me a lot of confidence.

提案: Give a clear opinion with organized reasons and specific examples. Start with a topic sentence stating your view, then use linking words (for example, because, also) to introduce reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete thoughts; be specific about trends or places where bikes are popular.

例: Yes, I do. In China, many people still use bicycles, especially in cities and university towns, because they are cheap and convenient. For example, shared-bike services make short trips easy, and many people cycle for exercise as well.

× Yes, I yes, I had when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I had one when I was a child.

The student attempted to answer a past-tense yes/no question. The original sentence repeats 'yes' and uses 'had' without an object, making it unclear. Use the auxiliary 'did' for short answers to past questions: 'Yes, I did.' Then provide a clear past-tense statement with an object: 'I had one when I was a child.' This corrects redundancy and completes the idea.

× Yes, I do. I live in China. Uh, Yuli, the loss of bicyclers on the road because it's good for environment and exercise.

✓ Yes, I do. I live in China. Many people use bicycles on the road because it is good for the environment and for exercise.

The original contains several problems: unclear word 'Yuli' and phrase 'the loss of bicyclers' which does not make sense in context; missing articles and incorrect noun form 'bicyclers'; missing 'the' before 'environment' and missing parallel preposition before 'exercise'. The corrected sentence uses a clear subject 'Many people', correct noun 'bicycles' implied by 'use bicycles' or 'use bicycles' and the idiomatic phrase 'good for the environment and for exercise'. Also expanded 'it's' to 'it is' for clarity. This fits the present-tense question about popularity.