Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise, correct grammar, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the phrase “with four wheels” to “that had training wheels” (if meant), and include a brief reason or memory using a linking word.

例: Yes, I did. It was a small pink bike that had training wheels, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house every weekend because it made me feel independent.

提案: Make the answer more coherent and accurate: begin with a direct opinion sentence, use linking words to connect reasons, avoid irrelevant or confusing details (e.g., “ended riding school” is unclear). Replace unclear phrases with specific facts or examples and be concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I believe bikes are becoming more popular because many people prefer them for short trips and to save money on fuel. For example, bike-sharing schemes in cities make cycling convenient, and my father recently started cycling regularly, which shows the trend.

× Although my dad just ended riding school and now he has his own bike which is red and sparkling.

✓ Although my dad just finished riding school and now he has his own bike which is red and sparkling.

The verb phrase 'ended riding school' is incorrect. After 'end' we normally use a noun or 'end+ -ing' to mean stop doing something (e.g., 'ended his studies' or 'ended riding'), but here the intended meaning is completing a course, so 'finish/finished' + noun or 'graduate from' is appropriate. Use 'finished riding school' to indicate he completed the course. Suggestion: use 'finished' or 'completed' instead of 'ended' for this context.

× It was pink and with four wheels.

✓ It was pink and had four wheels.

The phrase 'with four wheels' after 'was' is unnatural here. To describe possession of parts, use the verb 'have' (past 'had'). Saying 'It was pink and had four wheels' is the correct, natural structure. Suggestion: use 'had' to show that the bike possessed four wheels.

× I think so because a lot of people now prefer bikes more than cars.

✓ I think so because a lot of people now prefer bikes to cars.

The comparative structure 'prefer A more than B' is not incorrect per se, but with the verb 'prefer' it is more natural and concise to use 'prefer A to B'. Also 'now' is acceptable but placing it before 'prefer' ('now prefer') is fine; original meaning preserved. Suggestion: use 'prefer bikes to cars' for idiomatic phrasing.