Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cụ thể: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp thì quá khứ (ví dụ: 'had', 'rode'), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và rút ngắn câu không cần thiết để tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ 'after after') và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ tuổi, nơi bạn đi chơi). Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý khi mở rộng ý (for example, with, when).

例: Yes, I had a small pink bike when I was a child. I rode it around my neighborhood with friends after school. We usually raced each other and sometimes stopped at a nearby park to rest.

提案: Cụ thể: Cần làm rõ ý chính ngay từ đầu (ví dụ 'Bikes are not very popular'). Sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'motorbikes are more common than buses', 'especially in rural areas', 'people prefer them'). Nên giải thích ngắn gọn với lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Hạn chế tiếng ồm ồm như 'uh' và dùng liên từ để nối các mệnh đề.

例: I think bicycles are not very popular in my country. Motorbikes are much more common, especially in rural areas, because they are faster and more convenient for daily travel. For example, many farmers use motorbikes to go to the market instead of riding bikes.

× Yes, when I was a child I have a small pink bike I often ride.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a small pink bike that I often rode.

The speaker refers to a past state (childhood) so present tense 'have' is incorrect; use past tense 'had'. Also add 'that' or 'which' to link clauses and change 'ride' to past 'rode' to match past timeframe. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to past in past simple for consistency.

× I often rode bike around my neighbor with my friends after after. Study time.

✓ I often rode my bike around the neighborhood with my friends after study time.

Missing possessive 'my' before 'bike' and incorrect noun 'neighbor' should be 'neighborhood'. The repeated 'after after' is an error; combine to 'after study time' or 'after classes'. Also punctuation was missing; join into one clear sentence. Suggestion: use 'my bike', 'neighborhood', and a clear time phrase like 'after study time' or 'after school'.

× Yes, absolutely no because uh, in my country motorbike is more common than bus especially in rural area because everyone prefer it.

✓ Yes, not really, because in my country motorbikes are more common than buses, especially in rural areas, because everyone prefers them.

Use of 'absolutely no' is awkward; 'not really' fits question. Subject-verb agreement: 'motorbike' should be plural 'motorbikes' and 'bus' plural 'buses'. 'Rural area' should be plural or definite: 'rural areas'. Verb 'prefer' needs third-person singular 'prefers' to agree with 'everyone'. Also pronoun 'it' should be plural 'them' to refer to 'motorbikes'. Suggestion: ensure noun number consistency, subject-verb agreement, and correct pronoun reference.