Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and directly. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and correct tense (use past tense for childhood). Keep it to at most 3–4 short sentences. For example, say you did or did not have a bike, explain why, and mention an example (e.g., used public bikes or walked).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually used public shared bikes or walked to school because my family lived in a busy area and didn’t have space to store a bike. For short trips I preferred walking, but I rode public bikes sometimes with friends.

提案: Organise your answer: give a clear opinion first, then two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, moreover). Use correct vocabulary (electric bike, scooter) and avoid vague phrases like 'uploaded bike' or 'best part of men'. Keep sentences concise and use comparisons or examples to be specific.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially electric bikes. For one thing, many people prefer electric bikes because they are faster and require less effort than traditional bicycles. Moreover, they are affordable and convenient for commuting long distances, so you see them everywhere in cities.

× No, I don't have a bike whenever child, uh, I use the public bikers and I will take the lift from the, uh, all the people we have, uh, getting the license, uh, with, uh, with express, which, uh, they are, uh, long days, that type of people. I usually use the bikers, but I don't have my.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I used public bikes, and I sometimes took lifts with other people who were getting their licenses. I usually used public bikes, but I didn't have my own.

Multiple errors: incorrect tense and time expressions (should use past tense for childhood) and awkward sentence structure. Type 5 Past tense issue and Type 26 Sentence structure errors. Suggestions: Use 'didn't have' and 'when I was a child' for past possession; break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences; use 'public bikes' and 'my own' for clarity. Replace 'will take the lift' with 'took lifts' to match past context.

× Where there is a very different type of bike is available but now most of the people like the uploaded bike which give the more pick up and which is the best part of men where we can take them the long ride and long high distance which easily take.

✓ There are many different types of bikes available, but now most people prefer electric bikes because they give more power and are best for long rides and long distances.

Errors include subject-verb agreement and incorrect word choices. Type 27 Subject-verb agreement errors and Type 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. 'Where there is a very different type of bike is available' should be 'There are many different types of bikes available.' 'Uploaded bike' is incorrect; likely 'electric bike'. 'Give the more pick up' should be 'give more power' or 'provide better acceleration'. Suggestions: start with 'There are...', use 'prefer' for present preference, replace 'uploaded' with 'electric', and use 'long rides' or 'long distances' for clarity.