Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and add a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, it was too large for me, so I found it difficult to balance and ride confidently. As a result, I only rode it with help from an adult or on flat, quiet streets.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a specific reason or example with a linking word to make the answer more informative. Reduce filler words and combine sentences for fluency.

例: Not really — cars are much more popular in my country. For example, most families own at least one car because public transport is limited, so people find driving more convenient than cycling.

× When I was a child I had a bike but it's so difficult too cycling for me because my bug bike was too large for me.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike but it was so difficult to cycle for me because my big bike was too large for me.

Multiple errors: 'it's' is present tense contraction and should be 'it was' to match past tense ('When I was a child'). 'too' is misspelled/incorrectly placed before 'cycling'; the correct infinitive is 'to cycle'. 'bug' is a typo for 'big'. Also 'cycle' is a verb, so use 'to cycle' rather than 'cycling' after 'difficult'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent (use past when speaking of childhood), use correct infinitive forms after adjectives like 'difficult', and check spelling.'

× No, not really. Uh, people in my country prefer to commute with their personal car. They don't use bikes very much.

✓ No, not really. Uh, people in my country prefer to commute in their personal cars. They don't use bikes very much.

'People' is plural, so the possessive noun referring to each person's car should be plural: 'their personal cars' rather than 'their personal car'. Also 'commute with' is less natural than 'commute in' a car. Suggestion: match number between subject and noun (plural people -> plural cars) and use the appropriate preposition with 'commute'.