Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g. "this was gifted" -> "it was a gift"; "playing riding it" -> "riding it"). Avoid repeating "when she was a child."

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was eight; it was a four-wheeled balance bike my father gave me. I used to ride it in the park with my sister, which helped me learn balance quickly.

提案: Give a clearer, more organized response: begin with a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words and correct phrasing (e.g. "one of the main modes of transportation", "for short errands"). Avoid unclear words like "ransom errands."

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use them as a main mode of transport for short commutes to work, and others ride them to local supermarkets because they are cheap and convenient. Additionally, I often use a bike for quick errands around my neighborhood.

× I did have a bike when I was eight years old and this was gifted by my father.

✓ I had a bike when I was eight years old, and it was a gift from my father.

The original uses 'did have' which is unnecessary emphatic past tense; simple past 'had' is more natural. 'This was gifted by my father' is awkward passive and uses 'this' incorrectly to refer to the bike; use 'it was a gift from my father' for clear, natural phrasing. Suggestion: use simple past for possession and prefer 'a gift from' over 'was gifted by' in conversational English.

× It had four wheels and I was playing riding it with my sister who also had a bike when she was a child.

✓ It had four wheels, and I used to ride it with my sister, who also had a bike when she was a child.

The phrase 'was playing riding it' incorrectly combines continuous and gerund forms. Use 'used to ride' to express a habitual action in the past. Also add a comma before the relative clause for clarity. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and avoid redundant progressive+gerund constructions.

× Bikes are popular in my country because this is one of the mode of transportation when people are going to work or when they are going to supermarket it also my way of going to ransom errands. Yes.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because they are a common mode of transportation when people go to work or to the supermarket; they are also my way of running errands.

Several pronoun and agreement errors: 'this' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes' so use 'they'. 'One of the mode' should be 'a common mode' or 'one of the modes'. Use base form 'go' not 'are going' for general statements. 'Going to supermarket' needs article 'the supermarket'. 'It also my way of going to ransom errands' is ungrammatical and uses wrong words; 'ransom errands' is incorrect—use 'running errands'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number agreement, use correct noun phrases ('a common mode of transportation'), use simple present for habitual/general facts, and choose correct verbs ('run errands').