Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng thì quá khứ đơn nhất quán (had, used), (2) loại bỏ đại từ thừa (it) và sửa động từ sai (went → go/used to go), (3) gộp ý thành 2–3 câu ngắn rõ ràng, (4) thêm chi tiết cụ thể về kỉ niệm để phong phú nội dung và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (memories, childhood).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child and I used it every day to go to kindergarten. In fact, I kept using the same bike until I was in grade six, and it left me with many happy childhood memories, such as riding with my friends to the park.

提案: Cần tránh lặp ý, dùng cấu trúc logic với liên từ và sửa lỗi số ít/ số nhiều (option → options). Nên nêu một lý do rõ ràng và kèm ví dụ hoặc so sánh để cụ thể hóa quan điểm. Tránh dùng cụm từ không chính thức như “you know” trong bài thi; nói ngắn gọn và rõ ràng (2–3 câu).

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country nowadays because most people prefer faster and more convenient options like cars or motorbikes. For example, many commuters choose motorbikes to save time during rush hour, so cycling is mostly for recreation rather than daily transport.

× When I was a child I do have a bike which I use it every day to go to my kindergarten and like even when I was at grade 6 I still use the same bike to went to school and I really love that it bring me so many memory memorable things.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike which I used every day to go to kindergarten, and even when I was in grade 6 I still used the same bike to go to school; I really loved that bike because it brought me so many memorable memories.

Errors and suggestions: 1) Tense consistency: The sentence refers to past events, so verbs should be in the past tense (had, used, used, loved, brought). 2) Incorrect auxiliary 'do have' in past context: use 'had'. 3) Redundant object 'it' after 'which I use it': remove 'it' or rephrase; use 'which I used every day'. 4) 'went to school' is incorrect after 'used' — use base form 'to go' or put 'went' if restructuring; here use 'to go to school'. 5) Article/preposition: 'at grade 6' should be 'in grade 6' or 'in sixth grade'. 6) Word choice/repetition: 'so many memory memorable things' is ungrammatical and repetitive — use 'so many memorable memories' or better 'so many fond memories'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout and simplify phrases to avoid redundancy and incorrect verb forms.

× From my perspective, I do not think that bikes are popular in my country, because now people prefer a more convenient and faster options, you know, and bikes require a lot of time and effort. So I do think that I do not think that bikes are popular.

✓ From my perspective, I do not think that bikes are popular in my country, because people now prefer more convenient and faster options, and bikes require a lot of time and effort. So I do not think that bikes are popular.

Errors and suggestions: 1) Redundancy: 'I do think that I do not think' is contradictory and redundant; use 'I do not think' once. 2) Article/quantifier: 'a more convenient and faster options' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'options' — remove 'a' and say 'more convenient and faster options' or 'a more convenient and faster option' depending on singular/plural. 3) Word order: 'now people' is better as 'people now' for natural flow. 4) Tense/aspect: Present simple 'do not think' is appropriate for general opinion; keep consistent. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, fix article/number agreement, and streamline for clarity.