Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea. For example, use: “Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride when I was about eight, and I used that bike to go to friends’ houses and school.” Pay attention to verb forms (did/had, taught not teach), articles (a/an/the), and word order.

例: Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride a bike when I was about eight, and I used it to visit friends and explore my neighbourhood, which helped me become independent.

提案: Give a direct, concise answer and support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and simpler phrases: say “bikes are popular” not “bikes is popular.” Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Try: “Yes, bikes are popular because many families buy them for children as their first vehicle. For example, parents often buy a small bicycle before letting a child ride a motorcycle.”

例: Yes, bikes are popular because many families buy bicycles as a child’s first vehicle. For example, parents often purchase a simple bike to teach balance before allowing children to ride motorbikes.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

This sentence mixes present tense 'have' with the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events (I had, I was).

× I my dad teach me how to use bike when I was young at the age of 8.

✓ My dad taught me how to use a bike when I was about eight years old.

The original sentence lacks a verb after the subject and uses incorrect verb form 'teach' for past action. Also 'I my dad' is a word order/pronoun error. Use 'My dad' as subject, past tense 'taught', and include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Use 'about eight years old' for natural expression. Suggestion: place subject first, use past tense for past events, and include necessary articles and number words spelled out or numeric as appropriate.

× I don't remember the age but overall I have a bike.

✓ I don't remember the exact age, but overall I had a bike.

The clause 'I don't remember the age' is present tense and acceptable, but the following clause refers to the past and should use past tense 'had' instead of present 'have'. Also adding 'exact' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: maintain tense consistency by using past tense for past possession.

× Yes, bikes is popular in the country because that is the first that is the first thing you going to buy to your children if you want to teach them how to ride in some motorcycles.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in the country because they are often the first thing parents buy for their children if they want to teach them how to ride motorcycles.

Multiple issues: 'bikes is' violates subject-verb agreement (plural subject 'bikes' requires 'are'), repetition 'that is the first that is the first' is redundant, 'you going to buy to your children' is missing auxiliary 'are' and incorrect preposition; use 'buy for your children'. Use 'they' to refer back to 'bikes'. Also 'ride in some motorcycles' is incorrect; say 'ride motorcycles'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects match plural verbs, avoid repetition, include correct auxiliary verbs, and use correct prepositions ('buy for').