Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, give two concise supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use past tense consistently and correct word forms. Add linking words (for example, "and", "so", "because") to improve coherence. Keep the response to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a large pink bicycle that I loved, and I often rode it to the park with my family. My older sister taught me how to balance and pedal properly, so after a few falls I learned to ride confidently. I enjoyed those outings because they were fun and brought us closer together.

提案: Give a direct main sentence, then two specific and grammatical supporting reasons. Use present simple consistently and correct verb forms. Avoid vague phrases and redundancy; use linking words like "because", "for example", or "also" to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Colombia. Many people use them to commute to work or university and also for exercise, because cycling is cheap and healthy. For example, I often see groups of people cycling in the mornings and on weekends to relax and socialize.

× I remember I used to have a bi pink one really big it was so beautiful.

✓ I remember I used to have a big pink one; it was so beautiful.

The original sentence has word order errors and missing articles/structure. 'bi pink' is incorrect order and spelling; correct is 'big pink'. Also the sentence runs together and needs punctuation. Suggestion: use correct adjective order (size before color) and separate clauses with a semicolon or period. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× I really enjoyed going to the park with my family especially with my big sister because she always was teaching me how to use it properly.

✓ I really enjoyed going to the park with my family, especially with my big sister, because she was always teaching me how to use it properly.

The sequence of adverbs and auxiliary 'was' is awkward. 'She always was teaching me' is grammatically acceptable but nonstandard order; 'she was always teaching me' is the correct natural order for past continuous with a habitual past action. Add commas for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× I remember that I followed a couple of times but I always getting in again and I really enjoy doing it.

✓ I remember that I fell a couple of times, but I always got back on again and I really enjoyed doing it.

'Followed' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'fell' (past tense). 'I always getting in again' mixes tenses and lacks auxiliary; correct past sequence is 'I always got back on again.' Also maintain past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'remember' and past events. (Grammar problem type ID: 9)

× Yes, I think they're really popular in Colombia, the country where they're from.

✓ Yes, I think they're really popular in Colombia, the country where they're from.

This sentence is acceptable but slightly unclear: 'they're' refers to bikes. No grammatical change needed; keep pronoun consistent. Note: could rephrase to 'the country they're from' for conciseness. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× I think people use it normally to go to work, exercise or just to spend time with family and friends.

✓ I think people normally use them to go to work, exercise, or just to spend time with family and friends.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'them'. Adverb placement 'normally' is more natural before the verb. Also add commas for list clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Everyone really enjoying to have a really good ride in the morning, to relax before Saturday going to work or study.

✓ Everyone really enjoys having a good ride in the morning to relax before going to work or study on Saturdays.

'Everyone really enjoying' lacks a finite verb; use 'enjoys'. 'Enjoys having' is the correct verb + -ing construction. 'Before Saturday going to work or study' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'before going to work or study on Saturdays.' Use plural 'Saturdays' for habitual actions. (Grammar problem type ID: 10)

× I think that's really good idea to doing something different and during the day.

✓ I think that's a really good idea to do something different during the day.

Missing article 'a' before 'really good idea'. 'To doing' is incorrect; after 'idea' use 'to do' or 'doing' with restructuring. Remove the extra 'and'. Use 'during the day' at end for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 17)