Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "keep fit" and "stay healthy" say the same thing).

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it every morning in the local park to exercise. Because of that routine, I became more confident and healthier.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar and use linking words to connect reason and result. Be more specific about extent or examples (e.g., types of people using bikes or numbers) and avoid fillers like "you know what."

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular. Because air pollution is a serious problem in my city, many commuters now cycle to work, especially office workers and students, which helps reduce car traffic and emissions.

× Oh definitely yes. When I was a child my family always prioritize healthy so they bought me a bike to really rode a bike on a daily basis in the park to keep fit and stay healthy.

✓ Oh, definitely yes. When I was a child, my family always prioritized health, so they bought me a bike so I could really ride a bike on a daily basis in the park to keep fit and stay healthy.

Errors: 'prioritize' is present tense but the sentence describes past habits, so use past tense 'prioritized' (Past tense issue / Present tense issue). 'healthy' is an adjective; the noun needed is 'health'. 'to really rode' mixes infinitive and past form; after 'to' use base form 'ride'. Also add commas for clarity and change structure to 'so they bought me a bike so I could...' Suggestions: use past tense verbs for past-time descriptions, use correct noun form 'health', and use base verb after 'to' or use modal + base (could ride).

× You know what, right now the city that I am living, the biggest problem that our city are facing is air pollution.

✓ You know what, right now the city that I am living in is facing a big problem: air pollution.

Errors: missing preposition 'in' after 'living' (Incorrect use of prepositions). 'the biggest problem that our city are facing' has subject-verb agreement error: 'city' is singular so verb must be 'is' not 'are'. Also awkward word order and redundancy. Suggestions: include required prepositions ('living in'), ensure subject and verb agree in number, and simplify phrasing (use 'is facing a big problem: air pollution').

× So right now a lot of people are purchasing bikes to go to their work to save our environment.

✓ So right now a lot of people are buying bikes to go to work to help save the environment.

Errors: 'purchasing' is acceptable but 'buying' is more natural in this context; not a strict error. 'go to their work' is unnatural; use 'go to work'. 'save our environment' is awkward; 'help save the environment' is clearer. Suggestions: prefer natural collocations ('go to work'), use 'help save the environment' for clarity.