Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small errors; start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition ("I didn't have" twice) and the stray "1". Also briefly explain why you were scared to make the answer more informative.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because I was afraid of falling. Although my parents offered to buy one, I refused; later I realised my fear was due to lack of confidence and never learned to ride until my teens.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add concise, specific supporting details and use linking words for coherence. Remove redundancy ("not really that popular" repeated) and finish the thought instead of trailing off. Provide an example or contrast to strengthen the answer.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Azerbaijan. In cities most people use buses or cars because of traffic and limited cycling infrastructure; however, in rural areas cycling is more common for short trips and leisure.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was quite scared to ride 1, so even though my parents offered to get me one, I said that I didn't want to.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was quite scared to ride, so even though my parents offered to get me one, I said that I didn't want one.

The phrase 'scared to ride 1' appears to contain a typographical error '1' instead of the noun 'one'. The sentence otherwise correctly uses past simple tense. The correction removes the stray character and adds 'one' after 'didn't want' for clarity and grammatical completeness. Suggestion: proofread for typographical errors and ensure pronouns or nouns follow verbs like 'want' (e.g. 'want one').

× I'm from Azerbaijan and I would say that when I was growing up there, it really was not a popular option of transportation.

✓ I'm from Azerbaijan, and I would say that when I was growing up there, bicycles really were not a popular option for transportation.

The original sentence is understandable but awkward: 'it really was not a popular option of transportation' uses 'it' vaguely and the singular 'was' with 'bicycles' is mismatched. Replacing 'it' with 'bicycles' and using 'were' improves clarity and subject-verb agreement. Also change 'of transportation' to the more natural 'for transportation'. Suggestion: use the specific subject (bicycles) and match verb number, and prefer 'for transportation.'

× People prefer to take the bus or to go around in their cars, so bikes are not really that popular.

✓ People prefer to take the bus or go around in their cars, so bikes are not really that popular.

The phrase 'prefer to take the bus or to go' is grammatical but slightly redundant with repeated 'to'. Removing the second 'to' and using the bare infinitive after 'prefer' (prefer to take ... or go ...) is more fluent. Suggestion: when listing verbs after 'prefer', you can omit repeated 'to' to improve flow.

× But if you do go outside the urban areas, outside the city.

✓ But if you go outside the urban areas or outside the city, you will see more bicycles.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause after the conditional 'if'. To be complete, add the main clause that completes the thought; here I provide a logically consistent completion. Suggestion: ensure conditional 'if' clauses are followed by their result clause to form a complete sentence.