Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Corrigez la grammaire et la clarté. Utilisez le passé simple pour parler d'actions passées et évitez les constructions conditionnelles Incorrectes. Par exemple, commencez par une phrase claire indiquant que vous aviez un vélo, puis ajoutez un détail précis (âge, pourquoi vous l'aimiez) en une ou deux phrases courtes liées par un mot de liaison (par exemple «because», «so»). Évitez les phrases trop longues ou confuses et ne dépassez pas cinq phrases au total.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was eight years old because my parents wanted me to learn to ride safely. I used to ride it to the park every weekend, so I became quite confident on it.

提案: Améliorez la structure et le vocabulaire. Répondez directement avec une phrase thème (Yes/No) puis expliquez pourquoi en donnant des raisons spécifiques et un exemple. Utilisez des mots de liaison (for example, because, therefore) pour rendre le discours cohérent. Évitez les erreurs de sujet/verbe et les segments inachevés ; terminez chaque idée clairement.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country because public infrastructure is limited and most people prefer cars for convenience. For example, there are few bike lanes and long distances between places, so many people find driving easier.

× Yes, of course if I was younger I'd buy a bike in eight years old.

✓ Yes, of course when I was younger I bought a bike at eight years old.

The original sentence mixes conditional and past tense incorrectly and uses an awkward time expression. Use 'when I was younger' to refer to the past and the simple past 'bought' for a completed action. Also use 'at eight years old' or better 'when I was eight' to indicate age. Suggestion: say 'Yes, of course when I was younger I bought a bike when I was eight.'

× No, in my country has he has not a culture of the bikes. He must most of people that use a car or

✓ No. In my country there is not a strong bicycle culture. Most people use cars.

The original contains multiple structural errors: incorrect word order 'has he has not', wrong use of 'must', and an incomplete clause. Use 'there is not' to express absence (there be issue but primarily sentence structure), simplify to 'a strong bicycle culture', and state the main idea clearly: 'Most people use cars.' Also avoid 'the bikes'—use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' without 'the'.