Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise, and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (had, rode, learned) and vocabulary (ride, excited) will improve clarity. Avoid repetition and keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle and learned to ride it when I was about seven, which made me feel excited but also a bit nervous. For example, once I got separated from my dad while he was teaching me, and I remember being scared until he found me.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer, more natural phrasing. Begin with a topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.”), then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, especially). Use correct noun forms and avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially motorcycles. Many people use them because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic; for example, in Thailand there are many models from scooters to large motorcycles used for commuting and deliveries.

× Yes, definitely when I was a child I ever bite and use it.

✓ Yes, definitely when I was a child I used to ride and use it.

The student used 'bite' which is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'ride'. Also 'ever' is incorrect in this past habitual context; 'used to' expresses past habitual actions. Use past tense 'used' rather than present 'bite'. Suggestion: replace 'bite' with 'ride' and use 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× The feel at the moment it is very excited and nervous at the same time.

✓ I felt very excited and nervous at that moment.

The original mixes noun 'feel' and awkward word order. The sentence needs past tense 'felt' to match 'when I was a child' and correct subject-verb order. 'At that moment' is the proper phrase. Suggestion: use 'I felt' + adjective(s) and place time expression at end or after verb.

× And I ever got lost from my dad when he practiced me.

✓ And I once got lost from my dad when he was teaching me.

'Ever' is not used in affirmative past anecdotes; 'once' fits better. 'Got lost from my dad' is non-idiomatic; say 'got separated from my dad' or 'got lost while my dad was teaching me'. 'Practiced me' is incorrect; use 'was teaching me' or 'was training me'. Verb tense 'was teaching' describes background action. Suggestion: use 'once' and 'was teaching me' or 'was training me'.

× Of course, in my opinion, I think people in my country very like and love bike, especially motorcycle.

✓ Of course, I think people in my country really like and love bikes, especially motorcycles.

Word order and adverb placement: 'very like' is incorrect; use 'really like'. 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles'. Remove redundant phrases 'in my opinion' if 'I think' is used. Suggestion: use 'really like' and plural nouns for general statements.

× It is very popular in my country.

✓ They are very popular in my country.

Refers to 'bikes' mentioned previously, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Using 'It' and 'is' mismatches plural subject. Suggestion: ensure pronoun and verb agree with the noun number.

× It is Thailand, we have many type of motorcycle.

✓ In Thailand, we have many types of motorcycles.

Start with prepositional phrase 'In Thailand' for location. 'Type' should be plural 'types' and 'motorcycle' plural 'motorcycles' to indicate variety. Also avoid comma splice by using a single sentence with proper structure. Suggestion: use 'In Thailand, we have many types of motorcycles.'