Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 발화의 명확성이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 중복(“six seven years ago when I was seven”), 중간에 끊김(‘with my…’)과 같은 불완전한 문장이 있어 듣는 사람이 이해하기 어렵습니다. 개선하려면: 1) 주제 문장으로 직접 답변하기(예: "Yes, I had a bike when I was seven.") 2) 추가 설명은 한두 문장으로 간결하게 하고, 연결어(so, because, when)를 적절히 사용하기. 3) 불필요한 반복과 말더듬을 피하고 문장을 완성해서 말하기. 예: 어린 시절 자전거를 언제, 누구와, 어디서 탔는지 구체적으로 언급하세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends almost every afternoon, and it was how I spent most of my free time because it was fun and kept me active.

提案: 의견 제시와 뒷받침이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 간단한 긍정과 이유 제시(건강에 좋다)로 끝나며 문장이 미완성되거나 일반적입니다. 개선하려면: 1) 명확한 주제문으로 시작(예: "Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.") 2) 구체적인 이유와 예시를 덧붙이기(예: 통근, 레저, 자전거 도로 확대) 3) 연결어(therefore, because, for example)를 사용하여 논리적으로 전개. 4) 한두 문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and exercise because they are inexpensive and good for health; for example, cities have been adding bike lanes which makes cycling safer and more common.

× Yes, of course I had a bike when I was six seven years ago when I was seven.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was six or seven years old.

The sentence repeats age and mixes time expressions awkwardly. Use past tense 'had' is correct, but the age should be expressed clearly as 'six or seven years old'. Remove redundant 'when I was' and the extra 'seven years ago' to avoid confusion. Suggestion: choose either a specific age or a time phrase, e.g., 'when I was six' or 'when I was six or seven years old.'

× So So I used to ride my bike with my

✓ So I used to ride my bike with my friends.

The fragment ends abruptly without an object; add a noun to complete the idea. 'Used to' is followed by the base verb 'ride' (which is correct). Complete the sentence by specifying whom you rode with, e.g., 'with my friends.' Ensure sentences are finished to convey full meaning.

× Yes, of course in my country many people like to ride the bike and also bike is more healthy for our body.

✓ Yes, of course in my country many people like to ride bikes, and biking is healthier for our bodies.

Use plural 'bikes' after 'many people' and avoid repeating 'bike' as a noun awkwardly. Replace 'ride the bike' with 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike.' Use 'biking' as a gerund to describe the activity. 'More healthy' is less preferred than 'healthier.' Also pluralize 'body' to 'bodies' when speaking generally about people.