Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Risposta: Migliora la naturalezza e la correttezza grammaticale. Usa una frase tematica diretta, correggi errori come "do a lot of ride" -> "go for a lot of rides" e evita ripetizioni (es. "I had a bike" e "when I was a child" potrebbero essere fuse). Aggiungi un dettaglio specifico (luogo, attività o una breve aneddoto) collegato con una congiunzione per coerenza.

例: Yes, I did — I had a blue bike when I was about eight. I have fond memories of riding it with my cousins around the park, and we often raced each other after school, which was always exciting.

提案: Risposta: Rendi la risposta più fluida e coesa. Evita frasi frammentate come "Honestly." e correggi errori grammaticali ("doing ride" -> "going for rides"; doppia preposizione "with with"). Fornisci una ragione specifica per il cambiamento di popolarità (per esempio aumento delle auto o tecnologia) e collega le idee con connettori come "because" o "however".

例: I don't think bikes are as popular now as they used to be because more families own cars and children often prefer indoor activities. However, when I was a child many kids rode bikes and we practiced tricks together in the neighborhood.

× I have beautiful memories with that object because I used to do a lot of ride with my cousins.

✓ I have beautiful memories of that object because I used to do a lot of riding with my cousins.

The noun 'ride' is incorrect after 'do a lot of' which requires a gerund when referring to activities. Use the gerund 'riding' to indicate the activity. Also, the preposition 'of' is the correct collocation with 'have memories'. Suggestion: use 'do a lot of riding' or 'go on a lot of rides' and 'memories of'. (Italiano: Usare il gerundio 'riding' dopo 'do a lot of' e la preposizione corretta 'of' con 'memories'.)

× Nowadays I think that bikes are not so popular. Honestly.

✓ Nowadays I think that bikes are not so popular, honestly.

'Honestly' as a comment adverb should be attached to the sentence rather than standing alone as a fragment. Combine it with the main clause or place it before/after the clause. Suggestion: write '...not so popular, honestly.' to avoid a sentence fragment. (Italiano: 'Honestly' non deve essere una frase isolata; collegarla alla proposizione principale per evitare un frammento.)

× I remember when I was little, bikes were so popular. I used to see a lot of kids of my age that were doing ride and we were doing tricks with with bikes.

✓ I remember when I was little, bikes were so popular. I used to see a lot of kids my age who were riding, and we did tricks with bikes.

Use 'kids my age' rather than 'kids of my age'. After 'were' the activity should be in gerund form 'riding' not 'doing ride'. Also 'who' is the relative pronoun for people, and 'we did tricks' is a clearer past habitual action than 'we were doing tricks'. Remove the duplicated 'with'. Suggestion: 'kids my age who were riding, and we did tricks with bikes.' (Italiano: Sostituire 'kids of my age' con 'kids my age', usare il gerundio 'riding' e il pronome relativo 'who'; cambiare 'we were doing tricks' in 'we did tricks' per esprimere un'abitudine passata.)