Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise, add a clear topic sentence, and use linking words to connect points. Also add one specific detail (e.g., how old you were, what the bike looked like, a memorable moment) and keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences to sound natural and focused.

例: Yes. I had a bright red bicycle when I was a child, and it was one of my most treasured possessions. I used it daily from about age eight to run small errands around the house and to ride to the local market, which helped me feel independent and confident.

提案: Give a focused topic sentence, avoid repetition, and support your view with a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, therefore) to make your answer coherent and include one statistic or vivid observation if possible. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, I often see dozens of people riding bikes to the market or school every morning, which shows how widely used they are.

× Yes when I was a child I had a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike.

Missing comma after the introductory phrase 'Yes' and after 'when I was a child' improves sentence clarity; tense is correct (past simple) for a past state.

× It was one of the most precious things that I've had growing up I used to like it a lot.

✓ It was one of the most precious things I had while growing up. I liked it a lot.

The original mixes present perfect ('I've had') with past context; use past simple 'I had' because the experience is finished. Also separate into two sentences and change 'used to like' to 'liked' for clearer past reference.

× I used to use it when running errands around the house and also in the market

✓ I used to use it to run errands around the house and at the market.

Use 'to run errands' (infinitive) and the preposition 'at' for 'market'; sentence needs a period. 'Used to' correctly indicates a habitual past action.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

'Bikes' is acceptable, but using 'bicycles' is slightly more formal; no tense change needed. This is a stylistic suggestion rather than a strict grammar correction.

× Almost every household has a bike.

✓ Almost every household has a bicycle.

'Bike' is understandable, but 'a bicycle' matches the singular noun form after 'every household' and is slightly more natural in formal speech.

× It's one of the things that people use it the most when running errands around the market.

✓ It's one of the things people use the most when running errands at the market.

Remove the redundant pronoun 'it' after 'people use'. Also replace 'around the market' with 'at the market' for natural preposition use.

× So if I go to school market, I always see people using the bicycle.

✓ When I go to the school or the market, I always see people using bicycles.

Original 'school market' is unclear; separate into 'school or the market' or clarify intended meaning. Use plural 'bicycles' to match 'people' and natural English. Use 'when' for habitual observation.

× So it's yes, it's very popular.

✓ So yes, bicycles are very popular.

Remove redundant 'it's' and reorder to 'So yes, bicycles are very popular' for clarity and fluency.