Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and slightly longer with one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Correct grammar (use articles) and avoid repetition. For example, start: “Yes, I did.” then add a brief detail about the bike (type, how you used it, or a memory) using a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used to ride it around the park near my home. Because it was light and easy to handle, I learned to ride without help by the time I was seven.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove filler sounds and correct phrasing (use "bike lanes" or "paths"). Be specific about who uses them and where, and avoid vague words like "this."

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities now have dedicated bike lanes and scenic cycling routes. For example, commuters often cycle to work to avoid traffic, and families use riverside paths for weekend rides.

× Yes I did, I had bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'bike' requires an article in this singular context. This is a singular and plural issue (more precisely article with singular noun). Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike' and separate the two clauses into proper sentences or use a comma and coordinating conjunction. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular, countable nouns and punctuate sentences clearly.

× Of course, yeah. I think this is very popular in my country because there's a, uh, bike side for, for bikers to explore the route.

✓ Of course. Yes, I think they are very popular in my country because there's a bike lane for bikers to explore routes.

Multiple issues: 'this is very popular' is awkward when referring to 'bikes' (plural subject) so use 'they are' to match plural; 'bike side' is incorrect collocation—'bike lane' or 'cycle path' is correct; 'the route' is too specific, better 'routes' generally. This falls under incorrect use of the definite article and sentence structure; ensure subject-number agreement ('they are') and use the correct noun phrase 'a bike lane'. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs to plural nouns, use common collocations (bike lane/cycle path), and prefer plural 'routes' for general statements.