Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be consistent with tense and answer directly. Start with a clear topic sentence (I didn’t have a bike as a child), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “around the car”).

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I always wanted one, especially a bicycle with a front basket and colorful accessories. For example, I imagined putting a bell and ribbons on the handlebars so it would look cheerful and be easy to spot when I rode with friends.

提案: Be clear and accurate about facts and use linking words to organize reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘accessible’, ‘affordable’) and complete sentences. Give one or two specific reasons and an example to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in Hong Kong because the city is crowded and compact. For instance, bikes are convenient for short trips and are more affordable than cars. Moreover, many people use bike-sharing services, which makes cycling an accessible option for daily errands.

× Unfortunately I don't, but I really want to have a bike when I was a kid.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't, but I really wanted to have a bike when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so use past tense: 'didn't' (did not) for not having a bike and 'wanted' for desire in the past. Also 'want to have' is a present construction; change to 'wanted to have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep tense consistent by using past tense for all verbs referring to childhood. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Like my dream bike will be decorated by a basket and I can put lots of accessory around the car.

✓ My dream bike would have a basket, and I could put lots of accessories on the bike.

Several errors: 'will be decorated by a basket' is an awkward passive future for a hypothetical past desire; 'would have' or 'had' fits better. 'I can' should match past/hypothetical mood: use 'could' or 'would be able to'. 'Accessory' should be plural 'accessories'. 'Around the car' is incorrect: speaker meant the bike, so use 'on the bike' or 'around the bike'. Suggestion: use appropriate tense/mood and correct noun plural and correct object reference. Grammar_problem_type_id:8

× I mean around the bike.

✓ I mean on the bike.

The preposition 'around' is not the best choice when talking about putting accessories on a bike. 'On' is more natural to indicate items attached to or placed on a bicycle. Also this short sentence clarifies the previous sentence. Suggestion: choose precise prepositions for location. Grammar_problem_type_id:11

× Yes, absolutely, because Hong Kong is crowded and small.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Hong Kong is crowded and small.

This sentence is mostly correct but punctuation can improve clarity: separate into two sentences. No tense change needed. No grammatical error beyond stylistic punctuation. Suggestion: use a period to separate the short agreement from the explanation. Grammar_problem_type_id:22

× So these kind of public transportation including bike are popular because first of all, it's easy to assess you can buy in a affordable prices even though if you're.

✓ So this kind of public transportation, including bikes, is popular because, first of all, it is easy to access and you can buy them at affordable prices even if you are busy.

Multiple issues: 'these kind of' should be 'this kind of' or 'these kinds of'; 'public transportation' is uncountable, so use 'this kind of public transportation'. 'Including bike' should be 'including bikes' (plural). Subject-verb agreement: 'is popular' matches the singular 'this kind'. 'it's easy to assess' is wrong verb: use 'easy to access'. 'you can buy in a affordable prices' has wrong preposition and article: use 'buy them at affordable prices'. 'even though if you're' is incomplete; finish idea such as 'even if you are busy'. Suggestions: choose correct quantifiers, match singular/plural forms, use correct verbs and prepositions, and complete clauses for clarity. Grammar_problem_type_id:1