Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, and subject-verb agreement) and avoid repeating the same idea. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It originally belonged to my brother and was blue, but we painted it pink, which made it much more fun for me. Recently I got a new pink bike that I enjoy riding on weekends.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'alternative' instead of 'change', 'exercise' instead of 'sport' as a noun). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like 'yeah'.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because petrol is expensive, so many people use bicycles as an economical alternative to cars. In addition, cycling is a good form of exercise and is convenient for short journeys.

× Yes, I had a pink bike from my brother and we just changed the color because this bike was blue and now it pink and now I have a new pink bike and it's really good activities.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bike from my brother, and we just changed the color because this bike was blue and now it is pink. Now I have a new pink bike, and it's really good for activities.

Problems: incorrect preposition and missing verb forms. 'From my brother' is acceptable for ownership but sounds better as 'that I got from my brother'; however the main issue is missing verb 'is' in 'now it pink' (present tense 'to be' required). Also 'good activities' is incorrect collocation; use 'good for activities' or 'good for exercising'. Suggestions: include the verb 'is' for present tense, use commas to separate clauses, and use 'for' to show purpose ('good for activities').

× I think yeah because we have really high prices for gas and bike is a really good change for cars and it's good activities if you want to be sport.

✓ I think so, because we have really high gas prices and bikes are a really good alternative to cars. They're good for activities if you want to be sporty.

Problems: present tense and subject-verb agreement. 'Bike is' should be 'bikes are' to match plural subject and general statement. 'I think yeah' is informal; 'I think so' is better. 'Good activities' is incorrect collocation; use 'good for activities' or 'good for staying active'. 'If you want to be sport' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'sporty' or phrase 'to be active'. Suggestions: use plural subject with plural verb, choose correct collocations ('alternative to cars', 'good for activities'), and use appropriate adjectives ('sporty').