Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara pero necesita mejorar la estructura y la corrección gramatical. Evita repeticiones (“I was I was”), usa tiempos verbales consistentes y una oración temática seguida de detalles de apoyo con conectores. También limita la respuesta a un máximo de 4-5 oraciones y corrige la concordancia de tiempos (por ejemplo “became” en pasado). Añade uno o dos detalles específicos para enriquecer la respuesta, como quién te enseñó o un recuerdo concreto.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was four, but I didn’t learn to ride properly until I was seven. At first it felt difficult because I kept losing my balance, but after practicing with my father in the park I became much more confident.

提案: Buena idea general, pero mejora la fluidez y evita repeticiones (“I don't I don't”). Organiza la respuesta con una idea principal seguida de razones y un ejemplo, usando conectores como “however” o “for example”. Añade detalles específicos (por ejemplo estadísticas, diferencias culturales o ejemplos de ciudades) para mostrar vocabulario y precisión. Mantén 3–4 oraciones y corrige pequeños errores de gramática y puntuación.

例: No, I don’t think cycling is very popular overall. Compared with countries like Belgium or the Netherlands, fewer people use bikes for daily transport here. However, many main cities have dedicated bike lanes, and cycling is becoming more common among students and commuters.

× Yes I did. I had a bike when I was four years old and I started riding when I was I was seven, at the beginning, it was difficult for me, but then it becomes easier

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was four years old and I started riding when I was seven. At the beginning, it was difficult for me, but then it became easier.

The sentence contains inconsistent verb tenses. The speaker describes past events (having a bike, starting to ride), so all verbs referring to those events should be in the past tense. 'becomes' is present tense and should be 'became' to match the past narrative. Also there is a repetition 'I was I was' and missing punctuation; these are structural issues that affect clarity. Suggestion: keep verbs that refer to the same past time frame in the past tense and proofread for repeated words and sentence boundaries.

× No, I don't I don't think bikes are popular in my country compared with other countries in Europe such as Belgium or France for example, but there are roads available for riding bikes here, at least in the main cities.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country compared with other countries in Europe, such as Belgium or France, for example, but there are roads available for riding bikes here, at least in the main cities.

The original sentence has a repetition 'I don't I don't' and some punctuation issues, but the verb tense 'don't think' is correctly in the present to express a current opinion. The main problems are repetition and punctuation rather than tense. Suggestion: remove the duplicated words and add commas to separate clauses for clarity.