Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response did not directly answer the question and repeated the examiner's words. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (age, how often you rode, a short memory). Keep it natural, concise (max 5 sentences), and use linking words such as "Yes, I did" or "No, I didn't, but..." and "because" or "when" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and I rode it to school most days because it was faster than walking. I remember practicing with my father in the park until I could ride without training wheels.

提案: Your answer is disorganized, contains repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details (who uses bikes, where, or reasons for popularity). Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "however" to make your points logical. Avoid filler words and aim for natural vocabulary (e.g., "many people", "commute", "urban areas").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute in crowded cities. For example, students and office workers often cycle short distances to avoid traffic, and in some towns there are dedicated bike lanes that make cycling safer.

× Yeah, yeah, I think it's more popular in my country basically is most of the people ride a bike, bicycle, cycle and ATC more and generally you are high diverse society can use drives, cars, ETC.

✓ Yes. I think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people ride bikes, although in larger cities many people drive cars.

The original sentence has multiple sentence-structure and coherence problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). It contains run-on fragments, unclear references (ATC, ETC), and mixed subjects and verbs. Correction splits the idea into clear sentences, uses the plural noun 'bicycles' to match 'most people' and provides a contrasted clause. Suggestion: make one clear idea per sentence, ensure subjects and verbs match, and avoid vague abbreviations like 'ATC' and 'ETC'.

× and generally you are high diverse society can use drives, cars, ETC.

✓ Generally, in a highly diverse society, people can use cars and other modes of transport.

The fragment has subject-verb agreement and word-order problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). 'you are high diverse society' is incorrect: the subject should be 'people' or 'we', and 'high diverse' should be 'highly diverse' (adverb vs adjective). 'can use drives, cars' misuses the noun/verb 'drive'. Correction uses 'people' as subject, 'highly diverse' to modify 'society', and 'use cars' as correct verb-noun form. Suggestion: choose a clear subject, use correct adjective/adverb forms, and keep verb and object in proper order.