Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small hesitations, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. For example, say you had a bike, describe its type or how often you used it, and mention a brief memory or reason.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it almost every day to visit my friends. Because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I learned to balance quickly and felt very independent.

提案: Organize your answer: state your opinion clearly, then give 1–2 specific reasons linked by connectors (for example, 'because' or 'however'). Avoid filler words and finish the sentence. Provide a short comparison or example to make it concrete.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer walking short distances or using cars for longer trips. However, bicycles are common in some cities where traffic is heavy and cycling lanes are available, so a growing number of commuters choose bikes for convenience and speed.

× Yes, I had a bike when you when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence contains a repeated fragment 'when you when' which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the extraneous words so the clause is coherent: 'when I was a child.' Keep the past tense 'had' to match the time reference.

× Umm, I, I don't think so because my country people like to walk and they have a car.

✓ Umm, I don't think so because people in my country like to walk and have cars.

The original uses 'my country people' which is an incorrect and awkward pronoun/noun phrase (ID 12). Use 'people in my country' for correct English. Also change 'they have a car' to 'have cars' to match general reference and plural agreement with 'people.' Remove repeated filler 'I, I' for clarity.

× Uh, some people prefer to ride the bike, but.

✓ Some people prefer to ride bikes, though.

The sentence ends with a dangling conjunction 'but' and uses 'the bike' incorrectly, creating a sentence structure error (ID 26). Replace 'but' with 'though' or complete the clause, and use the plural 'bikes' for general statements. This produces a grammatically complete and natural response.