Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct tense and grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (e.g. “wives”). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences within five. Also correct vocabulary: say “when I was a child” / “when I was eighteen” / “I got my bike after I got my license.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. In India you must be licensed to ride a motorcycle, so I only got my first bike when I turned eighteen after I obtained my license. After that, I often rode it to visit friends and explore nearby places.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular correctly) and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary like “afford cars,” “congested roads,” and “commute.” Keep to three to four sentences max.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. Many people cannot afford cars, so motorcycles are a cheaper option, and because roads are often congested, bikes make commuting faster. For these reasons, motorcycles are more common than cars in many cities.

× I don't have a bike in my childhood because in India we need license to ride bikes so I get my bike on my eighteenth age by taking licence and afterward I take the bike and go rides and go somewhere else to enjoy my wives and all and also I take bike to

✓ I didn't have a bike in my childhood because in India you need a license to ride a bike, so I got my bike when I was eighteen after getting the license. After that I took the bike and went for rides to enjoy myself and go to different places.

The student mixes present and past tenses; the sentence refers to past experiences, so simple past should be used (didn't have, needed -> you need is general but here context past: you need vs needed; 'I got' and 'I went' are correct). Also singular/plural and article errors corrected: 'a bike', 'a license', 'when I was eighteen'. 'Go rides' is incorrect; use 'went for rides' or 'went on rides'. 'Enjoy my wives' is likely incorrect word choice; changed to 'enjoy myself'. Suggestions: maintain past tense consistently for past events, use correct articles, and choose correct nouns (myself not wives).

× Bikes are very popular in my country because in India every most of the people are middle class so they cannot afford a car and also the road were road was very congested.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because most people in India are middle class, so they cannot afford a car, and the roads are often very congested.

The phrase 'every most of the people' is incorrect; use 'most people'. 'Road were road was' is redundant and has wrong tense; use 'the roads are often very congested' since this is a general fact (present simple). Suggestions: use correct quantifiers ('most people'), avoid redundancy, and use present simple for general statements about current conditions.

× so everyone used bike for easy ride, easy go to work, so in India, mostly there are popular bikes better than cars and or other vehicles.

✓ So everyone uses bikes for easy commuting and to go to work. In India, bikes are generally more popular than cars or other vehicles.

Subject-verb agreement and noun form issues: 'everyone used bike' mixes past with general fact and lacks agreement—use present simple 'everyone uses bikes'. 'Easy ride, easy go to work' is ungrammatical; rephrased as 'easy commuting and to go to work'. 'Mostly there are popular bikes better than cars' is awkward and incorrect order; corrected to 'bikes are generally more popular than cars'. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual/general facts, ensure verb agrees with subject, and use natural collocations (commuting, more popular than).