Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and article, and add one short supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details. Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to and from school almost every day, which helped me stay active and made the short commute fun.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then one or two specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., 'heation' is unclear). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer cars or buses because they are faster and more convenient for carrying shopping or traveling long distances.

× When I was a child I did have a bike I used it before and after schools

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I used it before and after school.

The student used 'did have' unnecessarily for a simple past statement; use simple past 'had'. Also 'schools' is incorrect in this context — use the uncountable 'school' to refer to the regular time before and after attending school. Add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past facts and singular 'school' for routine times.

× I think in my country a bike is less popular than a car or bus for example, I think when people need to transport heation.

✓ I think in my country bicycles are less popular than cars or buses. For example, when people need to transport heavy items,

There are multiple issues: 'a bike is less popular than a car or bus' mixes singular and plural; use plural nouns and match verb form ('bicycles are less popular than cars or buses'). The phrase 'transport heation' is not a word; likely intended 'transport heavy items' or 'transportation of goods'. Also the sentence was run-on; split into clearer parts. Suggestion: use plural nouns to compare general popularity and use precise vocabulary like 'heavy items'.

× I think it's more convenient to go by bus or car because the speed

✓ I think it's more convenient to travel by bus or car because they are faster.

The fragment 'because the speed' is incomplete and unclear. Use present simple 'is' for general opinion, and refer back to the subject with 'they are faster' to explain why buses or cars are more convenient. Suggestion: complete the clause with a clear reason, e.g., 'because they are faster'.