Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and natural: start with a concise topic sentence, correct basic grammar (e.g., "shorter" -> "younger" or "a child"), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and specific information (e.g., who bought it, what it looked like, what you learned). Correct verb forms and word choice ("colourful colour" -> "colourful", "write" -> "ride"). Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought my first one; it was bright red with a sturdy steel frame, so I felt safe while learning to ride. I practiced in the park near our house and could ride confidently within a few weeks.

提案: Answer directly, then give 1–2 clear reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Fix vocabulary ("buys" -> "bikes", "bike roads" -> "bike lanes"), prepositions and article use. Be specific: mention infrastructure, safety, and typical alternatives. Use cohesive linkers like "because" and "so" and avoid filler sounds like "umm".

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Thailand because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be dangerous. As a result, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for convenience and safety.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a shorter.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was shorter.

The adjective 'shorter' is comparative and needs a comparison (shorter than who?). The student likely meant to say they were younger or shorter in height as a child. Use 'younger' for age or 'short' for height. Suggest: 'Yes, I had a bike when I was younger.' or 'Yes, I had a bike when I was short.' For clarity in this context, 'younger' is best.

× My mom bought my first bike.

✓ My mom bought my first bike for me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but lacks clarity about beneficiary. Adding 'for me' clarifies that the mother bought it for the speaker. This is a sentence structure improvement rather than strict grammar correction.

× It has a colourful colour and it's a sturdy frame so I can learn how to write it safely.

✓ It was colorful and had a sturdy frame, so I could learn how to ride it safely.

Several issues: 'colourful colour' is redundant ('colorful' alone suffices). Tense should match past context (use past tense 'was', 'had', 'could'). 'Write' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ride' for bicycles. 'Safely' is correct adverb placement but use past modal 'could' to match past ability. Also use 'frame' with 'a sturdy frame' but in past: 'had a sturdy frame.' Suggest: 'It was colorful and had a sturdy frame, so I could learn to ride it safely.'

× In my view I don't think buys are popular in my country because of in Thailand we don't have a bike roads so it doesn't suit for bigger people.

✓ In my view, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because in Thailand we don't have bike lanes, so they aren't suitable for bigger people.

Multiple errors: 'buys' is a misspelling of 'bikes' (incorrect word). 'because of in Thailand' is ungrammatical; use 'because' or 'because in Thailand' but not both. 'a bike roads' has article and plural mismatch; use 'bike lanes' or 'bike roads' without 'a'. 'it doesn't suit for bigger people' is incorrect pronoun and verb usage; use plural 'they aren't suitable for bigger people' or 'they don't suit larger people.' Also ensure commas for clarity. Suggest simpler phrasing: 'I don't think bikes are popular in Thailand because we don't have bike lanes, so they aren't suitable for larger people.'

× Umm telling people ride a motorbike or a car instead.

✓ Umm, people ride motorbikes or cars instead.

Original is a fragment and uses an incorrect verb form 'telling people ride'. Remove 'telling' and use a complete clause: 'people ride motorbikes or cars instead.' Keep tense consistent with present general statement. If meaning 'they tell people to ride...' then: 'They tell people to ride motorbikes or drive cars instead.'