Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., “a pink bike,” “training wheels”) and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase to connect details (e.g., “because” or “which”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a pink bike as a child because my father bought it for me. It had small training wheels on each side, which helped me learn to balance while I practiced riding.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with one or two specific reasons and use linking words for coherence (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “as a result”). Fix awkward phrasing (e.g., “to school,” “to work,” “throughout the country”). Keep sentences natural and not repetitive.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the Philippines because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers use bicycles to get to school or work, especially in busy neighborhoods where traffic is heavy.

× It's a color pink one and it has a practice wheels on the sides two small wheels on the side and it helped me a lot to practice my balance in terms of biking.

✓ It was a pink one and it had practice wheels on the sides; two small wheels that helped me a lot to practice my balance when biking.

Errors: incorrect article and word order ('a color pink one' should be 'a pink one' or 'a pink bike'); incorrect article-number agreement with 'a practice wheels' (singular article with plural noun). Tense consistency: student is talking about childhood so past tense 'was' and 'had' are appropriate. Also improve clarity by combining clauses and using 'when biking' instead of 'in terms of biking'. Suggestion: use correct article+noun forms, match singular/plural, keep consistent past tense, and simplify phrase order. Grammar problem type ID:22

× it has a practice wheels on the sides two small wheels on the side and it helped me a lot to practice my balance in terms of biking.

✓ it had practice wheels on the sides, two small wheels on the sides, and they helped me a lot to practise my balance when biking.

Errors: 'a practice wheels' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'wheels' — subject-verb and article-number mismatch. Also 'it has' should be past tense 'it had' to match context. Pronoun reference: 'it helped me' refers to wheels (plural), so use 'they helped me'. Suggestion: ensure articles agree with noun number, keep verbs in past for past events, and match pronouns to antecedent number. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country, the Philippines because bikes are almost everywhere around the country.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country, the Philippines, because bicycles are found almost everywhere.

Issue: repetition and awkward present-tense phrasing. 'Bikes are almost everywhere around the country' is understandable but wordy. Use 'are found almost everywhere' for a natural present-tense general statement. Also add commas around the country name for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use concise present-tense constructions for general facts. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Some people use it as a mode of transportation when going to the school or going to their job locations and it really helps them to go there.

✓ Some people use them as a mode of transportation when going to school or to work, and they really help them get there.

Errors: pronoun agreement and articles. 'Some people use it' incorrectly uses singular pronoun for plural 'bikes' — use 'them' or 'bicycles'. 'the school' and 'their job locations' are awkward; use 'school' and 'work'. The second 'it' is ambiguous; use 'they' to refer to 'bikes'. Also simplify 'helps them to go there' to 'helps them get there'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their referents and prefer concise, natural nouns ('school', 'work'). Grammar problem type ID:12