Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn đã rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách có câu chủ đề mạnh mẽ hơn, sửa một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết ngắn để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Cần thay “If I'm not mistaken” bằng cấu trúc chính xác hơn cho quá khứ và dùng thì quá khứ hoàn chỉnh cho hành động xảy ra ở tuổi 12. Đồng thời hạn chế dùng quá nhiều từ nối không cần thiết và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

例: Yes, I did. I received my first bike as a birthday present from my uncle when I turned twelve. I remember being very excited because it had a bright blue frame and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park within a few days.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, cấu trúc và dùng từ không chính xác khiến thông điệp khó hiểu. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bằng lý do cụ thể và kết luận ngắn. Sửa lỗi thì, từ vựng (ví dụ: "plan for bike cycling" → "infrastructure for cycling" hoặc "bike lanes"), và ngữ pháp (thay "then doesn't have" bằng "there isn't" hoặc "we don't have"). Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "however" để nối ý mạch lạc.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly common, but they are less popular than motorbikes or cars. This is mainly because there isn't much cycling infrastructure, such as dedicated bike lanes or safe routes. As a result, many people prefer faster or more convenient motorized transport.

× Absolutely. If I'm not mistaken it was my birthday present from my uncle when I was 12.

✓ Absolutely. If I'm not mistaken, it was my birthday present from my uncle when I was 12.

The original sentence is grammatically correct in tense and meaning; only punctuation is needed. Adding a comma after 'If I'm not mistaken' improves clarity and conforms to standard written English without changing tense or structure.

× absolutely, but it's not as popular as some means of transport such as motorbikes or cars in my country because in my country then doesn't have bike plan for bike cycling

✓ Absolutely, but bikes are not as popular as other means of transport, such as motorbikes or cars, in my country because there is no bike plan or cycling infrastructure.

Errors include incorrect conjunction/case ('then' should be 'there'), article and noun phrase problems, and awkward word order. The main grammar issue aligns with incorrect conjunction and sentence structure: 'because in my country then doesn't have' is ungrammatical. Replacing with 'because there is no' fixes the clause. Also change 'it's not as popular' to 'bikes are not as popular' for subject-verb agreement and clarity, and adjust phrasing 'bike plan for bike cycling' to 'bike plan or cycling infrastructure'. Suggestions: use 'there is/are' for existence, ensure subject matches verb number, and avoid redundant phrases.