Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct but too brief. To improve, give a short topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details (age, how often you rode, who you rode with, or a brief memory). Keep it natural, avoid redundancy, and limit to about 2–4 sentences. Use a linking word if you add another detail (for example, “and” or “when”).

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park almost every weekend with my friends. It helped me learn balance and gave me a lot of freedom as a child.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is slightly unstructured and has some run-on phrasing. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Not very popular”), then add two concise, specific reasons with a linking word (e.g., “because” / “also”). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “infrastructure” instead of “proper bike lanes”) and avoid hesitation words like “maybe.” Keep to 2–4 sentences for clarity.

例: Not very popular. Because the climate is extremely hot for much of the year and many cities lack safe cycling infrastructure, most people prefer cars or motorbikes. As a result, cycling is more common for leisure than for daily commuting.

× Not really they're not that popular maybe because of the weather it's really hot and we don't have the proper bike lanes.

✓ Not really; they're not that popular. Maybe it's because of the weather — it's really hot — and we don't have proper bike lanes.

The original sentence is a run-on containing multiple independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or connectors. This is a sentence structure and conjunction/punctuation issue. Breaking into shorter sentences or using proper punctuation (semicolon, em dash, or conjunctions) improves clarity. Also remove the unnecessary definite article before 'proper bike lanes' to sound more natural. Suggestion: separate ideas into distinct sentences and add small linking words when needed.