Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng: mở đầu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và hoàn thành câu. Nên dùng thì quá khứ đúng (had, rode) và giới hạn câu tối đa 3-4 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in second grade. I rode it every day to visit friends and go to school. It was a red bicycle with a basket, which made it very convenient for carrying my books.

提案: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và từ vựng phù hợp: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, therefore), diễn đạt rõ lý do cụ thể (giao thông, sức khỏe, tiện lợi). Tránh lỗi từ vựng và trật tự từ, và giữ câu trong 2-3 câu, rõ ràng và cụ thể.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people cycle for exercise and to avoid traffic, and city centers are fairly bike-friendly with dedicated lanes. As a result, cycling is both a practical and healthy choice for short trips.

× I had a bike when I were when I were in second grade I ride a bike every day, everywhere, every time. When

✓ I had a bike when I was in second grade. I rode my bike every day, everywhere.

The student mixed past and present forms incorrectly. Use 'was' (past of 'be') with 'I' not 'were' and use past tense 'rode' instead of 'ride' to describe habitual actions in the past. Also the original run-on sentence should be split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestions: replace 'were' with 'was', change 'ride' to 'rode', and separate into two clear sentences.

× Yes, I think so because in my country but many people do them for exercise and so commun is very comfortable.

✓ Yes, I think so because in my country many people ride bikes for exercise, and commuting by bike is very convenient.

The original sentence has structural problems and incorrect word choices. 'But' is unnecessary and breaks the sentence. 'Do them' is unclear; use 'ride bikes'. 'Commun' is a misspelling of 'commute' or 'commuting' and 'comfortable' is the wrong adjective; use 'convenient'. Suggestions: remove 'but', use 'many people ride bikes for exercise', use 'commuting by bike is very convenient' to express ease of travel.