Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer brief, accurate and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and pronouns. Use linking words if needed (for example, 'because' or 'so'), and avoid redundancy and wrong forms (e.g., 'didn't have', 'couldn't afford').

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport, which helped me become independent.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using varied vocabulary and linking words (for example, 'because', 'for example', 'also'). Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like 'different types of different'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use scooters and commuter bicycles in cities, and there are also several local companies making affordable models.

× No, I do not have a bike when I am a child because my parents payment is very low.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents' income was very low.

Tense and noun form errors: The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'did not have' and 'was a child'. 'Parents payment' is incorrect: use possessive 'parents'' and a more natural noun 'income' rather than 'payment'. Also use past tense 'was' for the state of their income.

× He can't be able to afford it.

✓ They couldn't afford it.

Pronoun and modal verb errors: The subject refers to 'my parents' (plural), so use 'they' not 'he'. The phrase 'can't be able to' is ungrammatical and redundant. For past meaning, use 'couldn't afford' or 'were not able to afford'. Use 'couldn't afford it' for conciseness.

× Yes, I think there are many different types of bikes that are issued by the different types of different bike companies.

✓ Yes, I think there are many different types of bikes made by various bike companies.

Redundancy and incorrect word choice: 'different types of different bike companies' is repetitive. 'Issued by' is unnatural for products; use 'made by' or 'produced by'. Simplify to 'many different types of bikes made by various bike companies' to be clear and natural.

× Bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present simple is appropriate to state a general fact, so no correction is necessary.