Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly (Yes/No). Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (neighborhood, had, two bicycles, bus/microbus). Keep answer concise (1–3 sentences) and add one brief supporting detail with a linking word (because/so) to explain why you did or did not have a bike. Pronunciation and sentence rhythm should be practiced for natural delivery.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Although I lived in the same neighborhood, my school was close by so I usually took a minibus every morning instead.

提案: Make the response more natural and precise. Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No/Somewhat) and give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because/so/for example). Use accurate vocabulary (save money, good for health, practical) and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., 'heal healthy', 'save cart'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and provide a brief example or comparison for clarity.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and practical for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work or the market to save money and to get some exercise.

× Well, actually when I sharehood I have to bicycles because my school is building near my house and in every morning I buy a micro for go to school.

✓ Well, actually when I was a child I had two bicycles because my school was far from my house and every morning I took a minibus to go to school.

Multiple problems: incorrect word choice ('sharehood' should be 'child'), tense errors (use past tense for childhood: 'was', 'had', 'was far', 'took'), singular/plural and number expression ('to' -> 'two'), incorrect article and noun choice ('a micro' is unclear; 'a minibus' or 'a microbus' is appropriate), incorrect preposition ('in every morning' -> 'every morning'), and infinitive form misuse ('for go' -> 'to go'). Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past situations, choose correct vocabulary, place time expressions like 'every morning' before the verb if preferred, and use the infinitive 'to' before verbs of purpose.

× Sure, in my country, people very like to ride bicycles because if people ride bicycles can save cart and some people believe bicycles can heal healthy.

✓ Sure, in my country people really like to ride bicycles because riding a bicycle can save money and some people believe bicycles improve health.

Problems include adverb placement and choice ('very like' is incorrect; use 'really like'), awkward conditional structure ('if people ride bicycles can...' lacks subject-verb order), wrong noun choice ('cart' likely intended 'car' or 'cost'; corrected to 'save money'), and incorrect collocation ('heal healthy' -> 'improve health'). Present tense is acceptable but must follow correct subject-verb order and collocations. Suggestion: use 'people really like', use gerund after 'because' for general statements ('riding a bicycle can...'), and use appropriate nouns ('money', 'health').