Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”). Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Briefly give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so) and keep the answer to 2–3 concise sentences. For example, say who made the decision and why, and avoid unclear words like “back” that seem to be errors.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my father thought riding was dangerous. He also believed biking was more suitable for boys, so he didn’t allow me to learn. As a result, I rarely rode a bike until I was older.

提案: Make the answer more organized and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines.”). Then add specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, for example, many). Mention who uses bikes, typical purposes, and a brief reason (cost, traffic, convenience). Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. Many people, especially those with limited incomes, use bicycles to commute to work and run daily errands because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic. For example, bicycle delivery riders and students commonly rely on them.

× No, my dad will not allow me to have that accident when when I were a child, since for him back is not for every girl 'cause it's for men.

✓ No, my dad would not allow me to have a bike when I was a child, since for him bikes are not for every girl because they are for men.

Errors: 'will not allow' is a modal/tense mismatch for a past habitual situation — use 'would not allow' (Modal verb usage). 'When I were a child' mixes past reference with incorrect verb form — use past tense 'was' (Subject-verb agreement / past tense but classified here as Modal verb usage because primary correction ties to modality). Other issues corrected include 'have that accident' which is unnatural; context asks about owning a bike so use 'have a bike'. 'back' is likely 'bike' typo, corrected to 'bikes'. Changed 'cause' to 'because' and fixed plural 'are' for 'bikes'. Suggestion: use 'would' for past habitual permission, use past simple 'was' for 'I', ensure nouns agree in number and choose appropriate vocabulary for context.

× Bike is a very popular here in the Philippines since they some people are ordinary people use this as their vehicle to to go work to do your their errands every day.

✓ Bikes are very popular here in the Philippines because many ordinary people use them as their vehicle to go to work and run their errands every day.

Errors: 'Bike is' should be plural 'Bikes are' when talking generally (Singular and plural issue). 'they some people are ordinary people' is ungrammatical and redundant — replaced with 'many ordinary people'. 'use this' should match plural noun: 'use them' (Singular and plural issue). Missing prepositions 'to go to work' and wrong pronoun 'your their' corrected to 'their'. Also removed duplicate words and improved cohesion. Suggestion: when speaking about a class of items in general, use plural form and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× And and yeah, I guess it is people are here.

✓ And yeah, I guess a lot of people here use bikes.

Errors: The original is fragmented and contains repetition 'And and' and ungrammatical clause 'I guess it is people are here' (Sentence structure errors). Rewritten to a coherent sentence that conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: avoid filler repetition, combine clauses correctly, and state the subject and verb clearly.