Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammatical errors and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Pay attention to past tense forms (use 'had' or 'used to have'), articles, and prepositions.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was in fourth grade, and after a few weeks I learned to ride it. I remember feeling really proud because I could ride to school on my own.

提案: Improve sentence structure and coherence by using linking words and correct grammar. Give one or two specific reasons or examples and avoid repetition. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'young people', 'bicycles', 'external fuel' -> 'petrol' or 'fuel') and complete sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people. For one thing, they are cheap to run because they don't need petrol, and for another, they are a healthy form of transport that helps people get regular exercise.

× Yes, I used to had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The structure 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb, not the past form. 'Had' is past tense; after 'used to' the correct form is 'have'. Also add the article 'a' before 'child' to be grammatically correct: 'a child'.

× My mother brought me when I was in class 4.

✓ My mother bought me a bike when I was in fourth grade.

First, the intended verb is likely 'bought' (past tense of 'buy') rather than 'brought' (past of 'bring'). 'Bring' implies moving something to the speaker's current location, while 'buy' means to purchase. Also, English uses 'in fourth grade' or 'when I was in class 4' but 'class 4' is unnatural in many varieties; 'fourth grade' is clearer. Finally, include the object 'a bike' to show what was bought.

× Then I learned to drive it and I was very happy with it.

✓ Then I learned to ride it and I was very happy with it.

When referring to bicycles, the verb 'ride' is used rather than 'drive'. 'Drive' is used for motor vehicles. The past tense 'learned' is correct, so only the verb choice needed adjustment to match the object 'bike'.

× Yes bikes are very popular in our country especially for the younger ones cause bike doesn't need any external fuel and it's safe.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country, especially among younger people, because bikes don't need any external fuel and they're safe.

Several issues: add commas for clarity. Use 'among younger people' instead of 'for the younger ones' for natural phrasing. 'Because' should be used rather than informal 'cause'. Subject-verb agreement: 'bikes' is plural so use 'don't' and 'they're' rather than 'doesn't' and 'it's'.

× It's a safe ride and it also. Help to exercise physically.

✓ It's a safe ride and it also helps you exercise physically.

The original has a broken sentence with a period in the middle and incorrect verb form 'Help'. Combine into one sentence and use the third-person singular present 'helps' to agree with the subject 'it'. Add object 'you' (or 'riders') to clarify who benefits, and keep 'exercise physically' or simply 'get physical exercise' for smoother phrasing.