Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and gives specific details, which is good. To improve, make the response more concise and natural by using a clear topic sentence, then add two supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “pink in color” → “pink”) and reduce run-on sentences by using punctuation or linking words. Aim for varied vocabulary (e.g., “distinctive” or “adorned with”) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike as a child. I used to ride it to after-school tutoring, and it was a pink bike with a small basket on the front. Because of its bright color and basket, it felt very girly and was easy to spot in the neighborhood.

提案: Good answer with clear opinion and supporting points. To improve coherence and naturalness, start with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, “for example,” “also,” “moreover”) to structure supporting details. Be more precise with age ranges and give one concrete reason or example (e.g., bike lanes, bike-sharing schemes). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “widespread,” “encouraged”) and keep within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children from around fifth grade through their teens own bikes, and in larger cities the government has been encouraging cycling by building bike lanes and running bike-share programs to reduce traffic congestion.

× In fact, I rode my bike to after school tutoring lessons and it was pink in color, it had a little basket in the front, so it was a completely girly kind of bike.

✓ In fact, I rode my bike to after-school tutoring lessons; it was pink, and it had a little basket on the front, so it was a completely girly kind of bike.

The main verbs are in the past tense which is correct, but the sentence has punctuation and phrasing issues that make it awkward. 'After-school' should be hyphenated as a compound modifier before 'tutoring lessons'. Use a semicolon or split into shorter sentences instead of a comma splice. 'Pink in color' is wordy; 'pink' suffices. Use 'on the front' for the basket position. Suggestion: break long sentences, use correct punctuation, and prefer concise adjective use.

× Yes, I do feel that bikes are used extensively in my country.

✓ Yes, I do feel that bikes are used extensively in my country.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable with present-tense meaning; no correction is needed. It correctly uses the present simple passive to express a general truth. Suggestion: None required.

× Most kids that I know starting grade fifth or so up until their teenage years have a bike and I also feel that larger cities promote using a bike to reduce traffic.

✓ Most kids I know, starting from around fifth grade up until their teenage years, have a bike, and I also feel that larger cities encourage bike use to reduce traffic.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing prepositions. 'Starting grade fifth' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'starting from around fifth grade'. Use commas to set off the modifying phrase. 'Promote using a bike' is awkward; 'encourage bike use' or 'encourage people to use bikes' is more natural. Suggestion: reorder modifiers for clarity, add necessary prepositions, and choose natural collocations like 'encourage bike use'.