Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in past tense for a childhood question, avoid hesitation sounds, and keep it concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., why you didn’t have a bike or how you used the motorcycle). Use linking words like “but” or “however” correctly and limit your response to up to five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my family owned a small motorcycle, so I often rode as a passenger with my parents to nearby shops. However, I learned basic road awareness from those trips, which made me comfortable around vehicles.

提案: Give a clear opinion in one topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons or examples and linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “however.” Avoid double negatives and redundant phrases. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise (max five sentences).

例: I don’t think cycling is very fashionable in China nowadays because many people prefer cars and electric scooters for convenience. For example, in big cities public transport and ride-sharing are common, so fewer people cycle for daily commuting. However, cycling remains popular in some parks and among fitness enthusiasts.

× No, I don't have any bikes, but I have a umm motorcycle.

✓ No, I didn't have any bikes, but I had a motorcycle.

The question refers to the past ('when you were a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Don't have' and 'have' are present-tense forms; change to 'didn't have' and 'had'. Also, 'any bikes' is acceptable, but since the student refers to a single motorcycle, 'a motorcycle' is correct; remove 'umm' as filler. Use consistent past tense to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense for both clauses: 'I didn't have any bikes, but I had a motorcycle.'

× Actually, I don't think it's very fashionable or it's not a trend in China about it everybody loves cycling.

✓ Actually, I don't think cycling is very fashionable in China, and it's not a trend that everybody loves.

The original sentence mixes clauses and tenses and has unclear pronoun reference ('it' and 'about it') and punctuation issues. 'Don't think' is present tense and acceptable for a general opinion, but the clause order and connectors are incorrect. Rephrase to place the topic ('cycling') directly as the subject: 'I don't think cycling is very fashionable in China,' then add a coordinating clause: 'and it's not a trend that everybody loves.' This corrects pronoun reference and clarifies meaning. If the speaker wanted past perspective, change to past tense accordingly.